Talk:Water Droplets (Sibelius)/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Tim riley (talk · contribs) 12:44, 19 May 2023 (UTC)

Starting first read-through. This little piece is news to me, and it was a pleasure to hear it (Kuusisto and Turunen) as a preliminary to reviewing the article. More anon. Tim riley talk 12:44, 19 May 2023 (UTC)

I don't think this is going to take long. The article seems to me to meet all the GA criteria, and these few quibbles are offered for your consideration rather than as diktats:

•  Done "The tiny piece ... however, cannot be dated with precision" – there are four "howevers" in this short article, and I think the main text would be better without them (though the one in the notes serves a useful purpose and is worth keeping, in my view.
•  Done "having mismanaged his affairs, his estate was declared bankrupt" – dangling modifier: the estate didn't mismanage his affairs.
•  Done "after all, he did not begin taking violin lessons" – the "after all" is more than a touch editorial
•  In progress Reception: You have three quotations in this section, each of which should, in my view, be attributed inline.
•  In progress "Sibelius's special brand of 'musical feeling'" – the Manual of Style calls for double quotes.

• Well, the phrase is my own summation of Goss's argument, rather than her words exactly. I therefore would be surprised if it's supposed to be quoted, but I will defer to your MoS knowledge. ~ Silence of Järvenpää 15:38, 21 May 2023 (UTC)

Over to you. – Tim riley talk 13:01, 19 May 2023 (UTC)

Hi, Tim riley (talk · contribs)! Thank you for taking this review on; how happy it makes me that you found and enjoyed a new piece. True, it wouldn't warrant an article if it weren't Sibelius's first surviving composition, but I figured that given it's mention in the first paragraph of User:Silence of Järvenpää/Sibelius loc (which I'll eventually complete and move over to List of compositions by Jean Sibelius), it would need it's own article (rather than a redlink). Regardless, I do find its pizzicato charming! One can almost see the notes 'splashing' on the pavement. ~ Silence of Järvenpää 15:36, 21 May 2023 (UTC)

This will do very well for GA. It meets all the criteria, in my view. It will, I imagine, be unique among musical GAs for the brevity of the piece that it describes, but is none the worse for that. Tim riley talk 18:22, 21 May 2023 (UTC)

Overall summary

GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria

1. Is it reasonably well written?

   A. Prose quality:

   B. MoS compliance for lead, layout, words to watch, fiction, and lists:

2. Is it factually accurate and verifiable?

   A. References to sources:

   Well referenced.

   B. Citation of reliable sources where necessary:

   Well referenced.

   C. No original research:

3. Is it broad in its coverage?

   A. Major aspects:

   B. Focused:

4. Is it neutral?

   Fair representation without bias:

5. Is it stable?

   No edit wars, etc:

6. Does it contain images to illustrate the topic?

   A. Images are copyright tagged, and non-free images have fair use rationales:

   Well illustrated.

   B. Images are provided where possible and appropriate, with suitable captions:

   Well illustrated.

7. Overall:

   Pass or Fail:

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