Talk:Unihemispheric slow-wave sleep/GA2

GA Review

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Reviewer: Cwmhiraeth (talk · contribs) 11:24, 18 February 2012 (UTC)

Rate	Attribute	Review Comment
1. Well-written:
	1a. the prose is clear, concise, and understandable to an appropriately broad audience; spelling and grammar are correct.	The prose in general is clear and the grammar and spelling are correct.
	1b. it complies with the Manual of Style guidelines for lead sections, layout, words to watch, fiction, and list incorporation.	The sectioning and layout are satisfactory.
2. Verifiable with no original research:
	2a. it contains a list of all references (sources of information), presented in accordance with the layout style guideline.	The references are in suitable formats.
	2b. reliable sources are cited inline. All content that could reasonably be challenged, except for plot summaries and that which summarizes cited content elsewhere in the article, must be cited no later than the end of the paragraph (or line if the content is not in prose).	Some of the species said to exhibit USWS do not have citations. If the information is available in the existing references, the citations could be made general by attaching them to the opening sentence preceding each list of species.
	2c. it contains no original research.
3. Broad in its coverage:
	3a. it addresses the main aspects of the topic.	The main aspects are covered.
	3b. it stays focused on the topic without going into unnecessary detail (see summary style).
	4. Neutral: it represents viewpoints fairly and without editorial bias, giving due weight to each.
	5. Stable: it does not change significantly from day to day because of an ongoing edit war or content dispute.	The article has been edited intensively in November/December 2011 and periodically since then. It seems stable.
6. Illustrated, if possible, by media such as images, video, or audio:
	6a. media are tagged with their copyright statuses, and valid non-free use rationales are provided for non-free content.	The images are suitably licensed.
	6b. media are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions.	The images are appropriate.
	7. Overall assessment.	I have rewritten the first half of the lead to provide more accessible information to anyone with little knowledge of the subjet. There has been no response to my requests for improvement and no improvement in the citations for some of the statements made as to which species exhibit USWS so I must fail this article. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 14:41, 13 March 2012 (UTC)

Review of this article seems to have stalled or been discontinued so I will have another look at it. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 06:47, 24 February 2012 (UTC)

Comments

In general this is a well written and interesting article. My main concern is with the references as mentioned in the table above. Where did the unreferenced information come from? Was it original research? I am also puzzled by the lead sentence " ... while a low voltage electroencephalography (EEG), characteristic of wakefulness, is present in the other." Is the word "electroencephalography" used in its correct form here or should the sentence be rephrased? Cwmhiraeth (talk) 13:54, 2 March 2012 (UTC)