Talk:USS Casablanca/GA1
Latest comment: 3 years ago by Zawed in topic GA Review
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Reviewer: Zawed (talk · contribs) 20:28, 21 November 2020 (UTC)
Stikkyy, I don't think I've seen you here for a while, good to see you are back. I will review this one in the next few day. Cheers, Zawed (talk) 20:28, 21 November 2020 (UTC)
This is in pretty good shape, just some minor stuff to resolve:
- The second sentence of the lead needs a little reworking - the usage of "Operation Torch" and "between" suggests a co-operation between the US and Vichy France, not an engagement.
- In the infobox, in the item "Ordered", what does E in the MCE stand for? It is only referred to in the construction as MC. I've skimmed through the United States Maritime Commission article and can't see usage of MCE, so raises the question, does the E need to be there?
- Zero idea. Per this, there doesn't seem to be any correlation between MCE, MCV, and MC for the type of ship being built. If I had to guess, it would probably be that it denotes the type of contract. Also reading further, seems like the Casablanca-class carriers are supposed to be MC. Oops.
- Also in the infobox, the code letters aren't mentioned in the text so technically requires a citation.
- Construction: fifty-fifth can be expressed as 55th, it is a pretty big number so numerals should be OK rather than writing it out.
- Construction: A cite is required for the end of the first paragraph.
- Construction: ...would take Casablanca's place. not clear what place is here? From the Liscome Bay article, I think maybe as a lend-lease ship?
- Construction: ...renamed to her final name of Casablanca. suggest "renamed
to her final name ofCasablanca." It is pretty clear that it is her last name. - Service history: reorder the cites at the end of the first paragraph.
- Service history: Upon arriving back, she... suggest, "Upon arrival, she..."
- Service history: ...and joined Operation insert "the" after joined.
- MARCOM needs to be listed in the references
- Some dupe links: United States Navy linked twice in lead, elsewhere escort carrier and sister ship are dupe links.
- Image tags check out OK.
That's it for me. Zawed (talk) 10:06, 2 December 2020 (UTC)
- Service history: ...repatriating them suggest replacing "them" with servicemen or similar.
- @Zawed: I've addressed your points. Stikkyy t/c 05:42, 3 December 2020 (UTC)
- This is looking all good, so passing as a GA now as I consider the article meets the relevant criteria. Zawed (talk) 07:30, 6 December 2020 (UTC)