Talk:Typhoon Alice (1953)/GA1

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Reviewer: Hurricane Noah (talk · contribs) 22:45, 8 December 2020 (UTC)

Doing. Noah^Talk 22:45, 8 December 2020 (UTC)

• Typhoon Alice was a typhoon that bought severe flooding to Guam during the 1953 Pacific typhoon season. I get that you want to relate the storm to the season, but I don't think this timeframe is specific enough since the season encompasses the whole year.

• Better? Nova Crystallis (Talk) 00:07, 20 December 2020 (UTC)

• Make sure you say "the JTWC" and "the JMA". The article can't be omitted even though it is an abbreviation. This issue is throughout the whole article.

• Done. Nova Crystallis (Talk) 02:02, 14 December 2020 (UTC)

• and JTWC reported that the storm had intensified to 65 knots (75 mph; 120 km/h), equivalent to a Category 1 typhoon on the Saffir–Simpson scale, one day later This should be split off into its own sentence. The time should be moved to the beginning of the sentence.

• Done. Nova Crystallis (Talk) 07:36, 3 January 2021 (UTC)

• Northwest of Guam, the typhoon traveled northeastwards, reaching its peak of 100 kn (115 mph; 185 km/h) late on October 18 near Iwo Jima Two locations in the same sentence don't bode well.

• Picked the latter location. Nova Crystallis (Talk) 08:37, 23 December 2020 (UTC)

• Alice then steadily weakened, down to a tropical storm on October 20 You need a present participle rather than an adverb for this and any appropriate adjustments.

• Removed the comma. Nova Crystallis (Talk) 07:36, 3 January 2021 (UTC)

• Is there a reason why rainfall is reported in centimeters? We usually use millimeters.

• Changed. Nova Crystallis (Talk) 04:29, 10 December 2020 (UTC)

• Why do you mention pressures multiple times? They generally aren't important if the storm is still building up. The peak appears to be the only important one here.

• I feel like mentioning them while strengthening/weakening to a category isn't that big of a deal. Without them I think the meteorological history might be too short. Nova Crystallis (Talk) 00:07, 20 December 2020 (UTC)

• On the first mention of pressure, link Atmospheric Pressure.

• Done. Nova Crystallis (Talk) 00:07, 20 December 2020 (UTC)

• You should mention JTWC winds are 1-minute sustained and JMA winds are 10-minute sustained

• I think that is moot because JMA did not have wind speeds for these storms. Nova Crystallis (Talk) 23:59, 9 December 2020 (UTC)

• by reconnaissance flights Who did these flights?

• Added. Nova Crystallis (Talk) 04:29, 10 December 2020 (UTC)

• historic western north Pacific tropical cyclone record "the" before this?

• Added. Nova Crystallis (Talk) 04:29, 10 December 2020 (UTC)

• just not observed --> but were not observed

• Done. Nova Crystallis (Talk) 04:29, 10 December 2020 (UTC)

• Alice began to steadily weaken later that day, to You need more than a preposition here

• Removed comma. Nova Crystallis (Talk) 20:18, 6 January 2021 (UTC)

• typhoon strength to 60 kn (70 mph; 110 km/h) same thing here

• Done. Nova Crystallis (Talk) 21:45, 6 January 2021 (UTC)

• As Alice traveled near the International Date Line (IDL), the storm had weakened to 35 kn (40 mph; 65 km/h) at 18:00 UTC --> Alice traveled near the International Date Line (IDL) and had weakened to 35 kn (40 mph; 65 km/h) at 18:00 UTC...

• Done. Nova Crystallis (Talk) 08:37, 23 December 2020 (UTC)

• Maybe mention baroclinicity for the restrenthening?

• I don't have the report to back this up, and neither does DTIC. I don't want to assume anything from some best track files. Nova Crystallis (Talk) 23:59, 9 December 2020 (UTC)

• You should abbreviate the US units

• Done. Nova Crystallis (Talk) 04:23, 10 December 2020 (UTC)

• was also recorded on the island should be were since it is two items.

• Done. Nova Crystallis (Talk) 04:23, 10 December 2020 (UTC)

• three to four feet (0.91 to 1.22 m) "3 to 4" so US numbers are consistently displayed in the article. There are more occurrences of this.

• Done. Nova Crystallis (Talk) 04:23, 10 December 2020 (UTC)

• 500 yards (460 m) Should be ft here for consistency

• Keeping it close to the source. Nova Crystallis (Talk) 04:23, 10 December 2020 (UTC)

• The fourth death was a farmer dying from a heart attack in his pasture during the storm, who had been previously reported as drowned. This seems a little clunky. The last tidbit could be sectioned off with a semi colon instead of a comma

• Done. Nova Crystallis (Talk) 20:50, 17 December 2020 (UTC)

• winds of 70 mph (110 km/h) were reported on the island sustained winds?

• Not sure, it wasn't proven by the newspaper. Nova Crystallis (Talk) 23:59, 9 December 2020 (UTC)

That should be it. Noah^Talk 01:03, 9 December 2020 (UTC)