Talk:Types of motorcycles/GA1

Latest comment: 9 years ago by CorporateM in topic GA Review

GA Review

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Reviewer: CorporateM (talk · contribs) 03:16, 29 January 2015 (UTC)Reply


I've started reviewing the article and most of my feedback below was regarding relatively small, fixable items, but substantial portions of the article, especially in the second half were unsourced. CorporateM (Talk) 03:20, 29 January 2015 (UTC)Reply

A first look

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Lede

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  • The first sentence needs some kind of different grammatical approach. Breaking it up into two sentences may be best.
  • "Strong lines are sometimes drawn" is metaphorical language that could be avoided
  • While not required for GA, I would suggest putting the seven types first, then clarifying that there are different classification types afterwards.
  • The first sentence of each paragraph in the current article seems partially redundant with each other and could be consolidated.

Standard

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  • Are "naked bikes" really synonymous with standard? I thought naked meant no windshield and limited dials (a sub-class of standard)
  • "moderate engines size"
  • " seemed to have disappeared, fueling nostalgia for the return of the Universal Japanese motorcycle (UJM),[1] which were admired for their simplicity, quality, and versatility.[3][4][6]" This sentence seems a bit suspect to me (editorialized) but I'll need to check the sources

Cruisers=

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  • "ride because" needs a comma
  • "Cruisers are sometimes called "custom" even in the absence of aftermarket modifications." I presume this is cited from citations 1/3 in the next paragraph, but because it's at the end of the paragraph, I'd prefer if it had cites after it.
  • "as such, are a source of pride and accomplishment" promotion
  • "Stereotypically" Do you mean "often" or "commonly" or is it really a stereotype?
  • The paragraph on choppers does not have any cites

Sport bike

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  • The second paragraph is unsourced
  • "In modern times it Now refers to any touring motorcycle."

Sport touring

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  • The last couple sentences are unsourced
  • Can we explain the word "wet"?
  • Most of the content in the sections below this one is not sourced.