Talk:Twilight's Kingdom/GA1

Latest comment: 3 years ago by Pamzeis in topic GA Review

GA Review

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Reviewer: Some Dude From North Carolina (talk · contribs) 12:00, 23 July 2021 (UTC)Reply

  • Add a short description and WP:ALT text to the image.
  •   Done
  • Non-free use rationale looks good.
  •   Thank you
  • However, I would suggest changing the image to one of Tirek, as the article contains commentary of his appearance.
  •   Done
  •   Done
  •   Done
  • "The two-part finale" → "The two-part season finale"
  •   Done
  • "airing as an back-to-back" → "airing back-to-back"
  •   Done (by another user)
  • "who praised villain" → "who praised the villain"
  •   Done (by another user)
  • (from "[[My Little Pony: Friendship Is Magic (season 4)#ep66|Princess]] [[My Little Pony: Friendship Is Magic (season 4)#ep67|Twilight Sparkle]]") – see WP:EASTEREGG. Suggest changing it to (from "[[My Little Pony: Friendship Is Magic (season 4)#ep66|Princess Twilight Sparkle]]") as we can trust a reader's knowledge of scrolling down.
  • Plot section: Part one is 342 words and part two is 397 so this passes MOS:TVPLOT.
  • Remove the comma after "the edge of Ponyville".
  •   Done
  • "and a tail of a horse" → "and tail of a horse"
  •   Done
  • "since humans did not exist in Friendship Is Magic" → "since humans do not exist in Friendship Is Magic" – see MOS:TENSE
  •   Done (by another user)
  • "more similarity of a bull" → "more similarity to a bull"
  •   Done (by another user)
  • "a good flow of one to the next" → "a good flow from one to the next"
  •   Done
  •   Already done: The tool didn't make any modifications as far as I can see.
Thank you for your comments, Some Dude From North Carolina. I have hopefully addressed them and if there are any other changes I should make, please feel free to let me know! Pamzeis (talk) 01:29, 24 July 2021 (UTC)Reply