Talk:Tuscan Leather/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: WikiRedactor (talk · contribs) 20:16, 19 April 2014 (UTC)

General

• Disambiguation links and external links are in good shape!
• I recommend adding in an "External links" section with a MetroLyrics link.

 Done

Introduction

• I think it would be best to just say that the song charted without being released as a single, since none of the charts listed are particularly great positions.

 Done

Background

• The liner notes referenced in this section don't imply that Marvin's Room is infamous. You can keep this statement if you find a reference that verifies its notoriety; otherwise, I think it should be removed.

 Done

Composition

• The reference you provide doesn't seem to include the full Curtis Mayfield speech, unless I'm missing something?

How would you suggest sourcing from MetroLyrics? The same as any other ref? Giacobbe ^talk 21:10, 19 April 2014 (UTC)

• I recommend changing "he's" for "he is".

 Done

Controversy

• Looks good!

Critical reception

• Can you mention in the beginning of the section that the song received favorable reviews? This would be good to know at quick glance.

 Done

Charts

• I'd like to see the chart positions turned into a brief paragraph in addition to the table; it can be in the beginning of this section or a newly-created "Commercial performance" section, your choice!

 Done

Credits and personnel

• I would recommend moving this content above the "Charts" section.

 Done

References

• Buzz Media should be listed as Spin Media.
• PopMatters should not be italicized.

 Done

The article is in good shape, and after my last wave of comments is addressed, I'll be happy to pass the article! WikiRedactor (talk) 21:05, 19 April 2014 (UTC)

Passing, congratulations! WikiRedactor (talk) 21:14, 19 April 2014 (UTC)

Comments from non-involved users

Prism's review

Reference style

• FN9 has PopMatters italicized where it should not be.
• FN10 should have The A.V. Club italicized.
• FN3, FN12 and FN13 have "curly apostrophes" (‘ instead of ') that need correction.

 Done

Prose

Lead

• Could you rephrase the first sentence of the lead to something like "(x) is a song recorded by (y) for his twentieth studio album"?
• "somg" (typo)
• "written by David Foster and Linda Thompson-Jenner, who receive writing credits." (clarify this in a way that readers are able to realize that they received writing credits for "Tuscan Leather")
• "it's" → "its"
• "Tuscan Leather" (in the beginning of the second paragraph) → The song/The track to avoid repetition.

 Done

Just some minor changes that in my eyes will improve the article even further. prism^△ 20:36, 19 April 2014 (UTC)

User:Prism, thank you! --Giacobbe ^talk 20:56, 19 April 2014 (UTC)

The discussion above is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.