Talk:Tropical Depression Seven (2003)/GA1

Latest comment: 15 years ago by GaryColemanFan in topic GA Review

GA Review

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It's been a while since I reviewed an article, so I figure it's time to get back into it. I have a little background in weather and climate studies, but I'm certainly not an expert. I hope that having me read through the article and give feedback from this perspective will help ensure that the article is accessible by a wide range of readers.

To begin with, the article looks very good. I see no problem with the sources or the images (although a catchier caption than "Storm path" might be nice). The stability and neutrality are not an issue. The breadth of coverage is as good as one can expect for a tropical depression that had only minor impacts. As for the prose itself, there are a few things I noticed:

  1. "The seventh tropical cyclone of the season as the name suggests" sounds a little awkward, although a comma after "season" might help.
  2. "the same tropical wave that spawned previous Tropical Depression Six" is also a little awkward. Perhaps "spawned the earlier Tropical Depression Six"?
  3. "an upper-level low" would be hard for some readers to understand. Perhaps "an upper-level low pressure cell" (or whatever the proper term is...it's been many years since I studied this)?
  4. "developed within the system at it tracked" Should this be "as it"?
  5. Is there a wikilink available for "convection"?
  6. "curved banding feature" sounds a little strange. Should it be "features", or is "feature" the proper word?
  7. "The storm continued its northwest track for its entire existence" I prefer to avoid repeating words so close together. Would "The storm continued on a northwest track for its entire existence" work?

Aside from this, I don't see any real problems. If you have questions or comments about any of these concerns, please reply here on on my talk page. I will place the review on hold and keep the article and review page on my watchlist. GaryColemanFan (talk) 19:13, 28 September 2008 (UTC)Reply

Thanks for the review. Seldom to I get such a thorough review, so this was a pleasant surprise. I fixed everything, other than the image caption, which is default when using {{storm path}}. Thanks, –Juliancolton Tropical Cyclone 19:21, 28 September 2008 (UTC)Reply
Everything looks good to me. The image caption is fine, as it gives a clear and concise explanation of the image. I looked through the article again, and I see no reason not to promote it to GA. Great job, and thanks for the quick reply to the review. I'm glad you found it helpful. GaryColemanFan (talk) 19:31, 28 September 2008 (UTC)Reply