Talk:Titus Manlius Torquatus (consul 165 BC)/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Iazyges (talk · contribs) 15:19, 6 July 2019 (UTC)Reply

Criteria

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GA Criteria

GA Criteria:

  • 1
    1.a  Y
    1.b  Y
  • 2
    2.a  Y
    2.b  Y
    2.c  Y
    2.d  Y (15.3%, mostly due to book titles and one incidental phrase.)
  • 3
    3.a  Y
    3.b  Y
  • 4
    4.a  Y
  • 5
    5.a  Y
  • 6
    6.a  Y
    6.b  Y
  • No DAB links  Y
  • No dead links  Y
  • No missing citations  Y

Discussion

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Prose Suggestions

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Please note that all of these are suggestions, and can be implemented or ignored at your discretion. I have made minor stylistic edits, feel free to revert any of them.

Lede

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  • Titus Manlius Torquatus (born before 208[1] I'd suggest mentioning his date of birth to the "family background" area, and citing it there, as usually it's best not to cite sources in the lede unless absolutely necessary.
  • Would suggest expanding lede, possibly with his diplomatic work with Ptolemy VIII Physcon.

Family Background

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  • It already counted 18 consulships, and 14 consular tribuneships before him.[3] suggest Members of the family had held the consulship 18 times and consular tribuneship 14 times before him.
  • alongside the great Claudius Marcellus during the Second Punic War while still in his early career would suggest either changing to early age, or clarifying that he had not achieved much yet.

Career

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  • but Münzer guessed that he was praetor in 170 suggest introducing who Münzer is, as the casual reader probably doesn't know. Perhaps but the prosopographical scholar Münzer suggested that he was praetor in 170
  • Titus was promoted to the first place, probably because his great-great-grandson was a member of the College of Pontiffs, which was notably tasked with establishing the Fasti. suggest Titus is recorded as being promoted to the first place, probably because his great-great-grandson was a member of the College of Pontiffs, which was tasked with establishing the Fasti.
  • At the same time, Augustus was also suggest mentioning that Augustus was emperor, and changing at the same time to Around this time
  • although Obsequens says that they had to face a plague epidemic at Rome. suggest changing face to handle
  • At Rhodes, suggest In Rhodes,
  • In 161, Titus drafted the senatus consultum suggest explaining what this is, as casual reader probably doesn't know perhaps In 161, Titus drafted the senatus consultum, nominally a letter of advice from the Roman Senate, but in Republican practice closer to a demand,
  • the Torquati suffered from a long eclipse, suggest from a period of obscurity