Talk:Thirty Flights of Loving/GA1

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Reviewer: Hurricanehink (talk · contribs) 06:31, 10 January 2014 (UTC)

Hah, I also reviewed Gravity Bone! Wasn't expecting to review this, but when I was it was the sequel, I had to.

• I think the "and released in July 2012" part of the first sentence should be moved elsewhere. It makes the opening sentence a bit too long
  • Done.
• "and offered alongside a free copy of Gravity Bone. Thirty Flights of Loving" - the way this reads right now has both Gravity Bone and Thirty... in italics. This is pretty random, but is there a way you could reword it so both titles aren't right next to each other?
  • Changed Gravity Bone to "it's predecessor"
• "scoring 88 out of 100 at aggregate website Metacritic" - "at" --> "on"?
  • Fixed.
• Didn't the protagonist die in Gravity Bone? Is this a prequel of sorts? Is it actually confirmed they are one in the same?
  • This game is not a direct sequel to Gravity Bone, story-wise. It just happens to be in the same universe and the same main protagonist. Yes, it is confirmed and it is spelled in the article ;)
• "an unnamed spy who is taking part in an alcohol smuggling operation alongside non-playable characters Anita, a demolitions expert, and Borges, a forger." - this is a bit long, and it'd be great if it could be split up somehow.
  • Cut it into two. Please check.
• What does the title mean?
  • No idea, the developer did not provide an answer to that :/
• How much did the game cost?
  • As an indie game, it is rarely revealed how much these games cost. As Brendon developed the game himself, I assume the cost might be close to $0, but its my original research :)
• Source for the Windows release date? The article just says July 2012.
  • Hmmm, fixed. Afaik, there is no exact date.
• "and follows hacker overseeing one or more adept agents that have missions to infiltrate buildings and steal documents" - once again, this would be better split off. And... grammar
  • Fixed too!

All in all pretty decent! Lemme know when you take care of these, and I'll be happy to pass. ♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 06:31, 10 January 2014 (UTC)

Thanks! Hurricanehink :D — ΛΧΣ^{21 Call me Hahc21} 15:34, 10 January 2014 (UTC)