Talk:The Return (Kamaal Williams album)/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Zmbro (talk · contribs) 17:15, 23 March 2021 (UTC)

Hey there! I know almost nothing about Kamaal Williams, but I'm bored and this looks like an interesting read so I'll review it for ya! – zmbro _(talk) 17:15, 23 March 2021 (UTC)

Thank you for taking the time. 😃 웃OO 17:28, 23 March 2021 (UTC)

Infobox and lead

• Infobox looks good, but question. Do we have any recording dates/ranges or studio(s) available?
• ", under his Black Focus Records." → ", under his Black Focus Records label."
• Link music videos

Background and development

• Is there a specific reason the duo decided to break up?
• "This style was labeled as "jazz fusion"" labeled by whom?
• Is there a reason Williams chose these specific musicians to play on the record? Or were they just studio ones?

None specified. 웃OO 22:41, 23 March 2021 (UTC)

• Asked this in the previous section but do we have any sourced recording dates/ranges or studios available? If not that's fine I'm just wondering.

None available. 웃OO 22:41, 23 March 2021 (UTC)

Composition

• I'm noticing this section is very quote-heavy. I would try to paraphrase a little bit more.

Release and promotion

• I'm assuming the tour went ahead as scheduled? Right now it only says it was announced.

They are just announcements. I don't recall finding a whole lot where they indeed performed at such places. 웃OO 22:41, 23 March 2021 (UTC)

Reception

• The lead mentions a summary of reception, stating "some praising the re-creation of jazz-funk sounds of the 1970s, while others questioned the length of certain songs" but that's not present here. I'd make it known in this section as well.
• Italicize Pitchfork
• Also noticing this section to be very quote-heavy. I would check out WP:RECEPTION to assist with paraphrasing.
• I'd add a summary to the start of accolades, such as "The Return appeared on numerous year-end lists in 2018." something like that
• Just my personal preference, but I would put the refs into their own unsortable col. You don't have to just my preference

Track listing

• Are writers available?

None specified. 웃OO 22:41, 23 March 2021 (UTC)

• Interesting. Don't see that often but I guess it happens. – zmbro _(talk) 19:26, 25 March 2021 (UTC)

• Total length?

Personnel

• Looks good

Charts

• I'd make the table sortable

References

• Copyvio detector is showing a couple violations over 40%. As I stated earlier, I would paraphrase a bit more, as certain sections seem very quote-heavy.

• Looks much better. Now it's showing less than 40%, ideally you'd want it lower, but it's definitely much better than before. – zmbro _(talk) 19:25, 25 March 2021 (UTC)

• I would use the actual titles instead of "AllMusic review", "Pitchfork review", etc.

I changed them all, though "Kamaal Williams - The Return" isn't really that spectacular either. 웃OO 22:41, 23 March 2021 (UTC)

• Archive ref 8, 21, and 26
• Access date for ref 15?
• Ref 22 is via wayback machine so I'd make sure that url is present.
• Are there available dates for refs 8, 18, 21, 27–32?
• Ref 33: is there a url or other info?

there used to be, but it wasn't the wire url. 웃OO 22:41, 23 March 2021 (UTC)

• Feel like there needs to be more info than just the title and website sadly. Is there a date/access date or other non-web info available? – zmbro _(talk) 19:25, 25 March 2021 (UTC)

• Is Tiny Mix Tapes an RS?

[1] this consensus says it should be. 웃OO 22:41, 23 March 2021 (UTC)

• Cool beans. I'd never seen it before so just wanted to make sure. – zmbro _(talk) 19:25, 25 March 2021 (UTC)

• Another question when further reviewing. Is "Piccadilly Records" supposed to italicized? Seeing it that way in the table and ref but in the text it's not. – zmbro _(talk) 19:30, 25 March 2021 (UTC)

Final thoughts

Overall looks good. Gotta be less quote-heavy in some sections and got a few other things to resolve but should be a GA in no time. For now on hold. – zmbro _(talk) 17:50, 23 March 2021 (UTC)

I should have resolved alot of the issues here. I hope the paraphrasing is ok, the rest of the quotes I couldn't do, at least not at the moment. 웃OO 22:41, 23 March 2021 (UTC)

I just addressed those last two issues. 웃OO 23:35, 25 March 2021 (UTC)

Looks good. Happy to ✓ Pass – zmbro _(talk) 18:06, 26 March 2021 (UTC)