Talk:The Man with the Iron Fists/GA1

Latest comment: 11 years ago by Khazar2 in topic GA Review

GA Review edit

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Reviewer: Khazar2 (talk · contribs) 06:00, 13 February 2013 (UTC)Reply

I'll be glad to take this review. In the next few days, I'll do a close readthrough, noting here any issues I can't immediately fix myself, and then follow with the criteria checklist. Thanks in advance for your work on this one! -- Khazar2 (talk) 06:00, 13 February 2013 (UTC)Reply

Initial readthrough edit

On first pass, this article seems very well done: clear, well sourced, and covering major aspects. I've made a few copyedits as I went, so please doublecheck me to make sure I didn't accidentally introduce any errors. My small concerns so far are below. -- Khazar2 (talk) 09:24, 13 February 2013 (UTC)Reply

  • "While fighting Jack, Poison Dagger is crushed between large moving gears." -- how does this fight start, and what are these gears? the transition to the brothel fight to this is rather sudden.
  • Rewrote a little, I'm getting the film again to find out what the gears were but I think they were just random gears you would normally find powering a brothel. Darkwarriorblake (talk) 22:40, 15 February 2013 (UTC)Reply
  • "The character was partly inspired by RZA's late cousin Ol' Dirty Bastard.[13][14] Crowe was inspired by Clint Eastwood in Dirty Harry (1971) and The Outlaw Josey Wales (1976)" --these two sentences are made slightly confusing by using "inspired" in two different ways in subsequent sentences. Perhaps the second could be something like "Crowe based his performance in part on..."
  • "To compensate for time lost to filming issues, " -- what does "filming issues" mean here?
  • The source doesn't specify, RZA is just quoted as saying it looked like they were having a bad day and had a problem.Darkwarriorblake (talk) 22:40, 15 February 2013 (UTC)Reply
  • "some scenes were filmed in a single take" -- this source doesn't appear to say that scenes were filmed in a single take, just that they were filmed rapidly, inspired by an ODB story about his doing a song in one take
  • I based the info off of this part - " So I know we're out of time, but for today you might have to go one-take, ODB-style.' Now of course Russell's a master anyway and he'll do it in one take. But I think telling him that story at that time helped because we were about eight hours late and it helped us capture a lot of things in that one day that it would have taken us two days to do." Darkwarriorblake (talk) 22:41, 15 February 2013 (UTC)Reply
  • "RZA's sandpaper-like iron fists" -- surely RZA wasn't really given iron prop fists for this scene? What was the prop made out of?
  • Source doesn't say but I added "prop" to the sentence to clarify, I'll try and find a source that says but the info on the film is sparse unless it is RZA talking about how awesome he is. Darkwarriorblake (talk) 22:40, 15 February 2013 (UTC)Reply
  • "As of February 2013, The Man with the Iron Fists has earned $15,634,090 from North America and $4,087,155 from markets elsewhere, for a worldwide total of approximately $19,886,863" -- a different number is given in the lead; these need to be reconciled.
  • Sorted this, having issues with a user who wants to use a specific source that gives it such a minor financial boost so he can claim it made back its budget. Can't be bothered having another fight over it with him. Darkwarriorblake (talk) 16:49, 16 February 2013 (UTC)Reply
  • "The Man with the Iron Fists is scheduled for release" -- needs to be updated if this happened on schedule yesterday.
  • Not necessary for GA, but it seems like more images could be easily added to the article: main cast members, Tarantino or Roth, ODB, etc. An image of RZA would be particularly good; his page has a number that seem to have appropriate permissions.

Checklist edit

Rate Attribute Review Comment
1. Well-written:
  1a. the prose is clear, concise, and understandable to an appropriately broad audience; spelling and grammar are correct.
  1b. it complies with the Manual of Style guidelines for lead sections, layout, words to watch, fiction, and list incorporation.
2. Verifiable with no original research:
  2a. it contains a list of all references (sources of information), presented in accordance with the layout style guideline.
  2b. reliable sources are cited inline. All content that could reasonably be challenged, except for plot summaries and that which summarizes cited content elsewhere in the article, must be cited no later than the end of the paragraph (or line if the content is not in prose).
  2c. it contains no original research.
3. Broad in its coverage:
  3a. it addresses the main aspects of the topic.
  3b. it stays focused on the topic without going into unnecessary detail (see summary style).
  4. Neutral: it represents viewpoints fairly and without editorial bias, giving due weight to each.
  5. Stable: it does not change significantly from day to day because of an ongoing edit war or content dispute.
6. Illustrated, if possible, by media such as images, video, or audio:
  6a. media are tagged with their copyright statuses, and valid non-free use rationales are provided for non-free content.
  6b. media are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions.
  7. Overall assessment. Pass

Comments edit

Thanks for reviewing this, I am on a work training thing until Friday evening so I won't be able to tackle these until then as the internet access up here is terrible, I will get to them ASAP. Darkwarriorblake (talk) 23:38, 13 February 2013 (UTC)Reply

No problem. I'm happy to hold this for a week if need be. Cheers, -- Khazar2 (talk) 12:59, 14 February 2013 (UTC)Reply
Haven't forgotten you, just have a sick kiddo. Your fixes look good at first glance; I'll do more of a check tomorrow. Cheers, Khazar2 (talk) 02:38, 19 February 2013 (UTC)Reply
It's ok, hope he/she gets better. Darkwarriorblake (talk) 07:52, 19 February 2013 (UTC)Reply
Thanks--just been fighting an ear infection like every other baby at Little Miss Khazar's daycare. Doing better today, though! -- Khazar2 (talk) 13:00, 20 February 2013 (UTC)Reply