Talk:The Lion, the Fox & the Eagle/GA1

GA Review

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Hi, I will be your reviewer for this article - congrats for working heavily upon the article - I barely find any flaws, except for the ones below. It's good you only have one image for an article this short.

General

• "The Lion, the Fox & the Eagle: A Story of Generals and Justice in Rwanda and Yugoslavia is a 2000 book by Canadian journalist Carol Off. It examines the role of three Canadians in United Nations roles in the 1990s:" - first speak about the book (production information, a little reception, add to it) before starting to talk about the characters.
• If you do want to talk about the main three men, please remove the bullet points - bullet points shouldn't really ever go into the intro.
• "Along with her research assistant, Sian Cansfield, they conducted over a hundred interviews, including with the three subjects, and compiled twenty binders of research." Four commas in one small sentence? How about this "Along with her research assistant Sian Cansfield, they conducted over a hundred interviews; they include those with the three subjects, compiling twenty binders of research." I haven't read the novel itself, so you may feel the need to correct me - go ahead.
• "Living in Toronto with husband Linden MacIntyre, the 45 year old Off wrote the book in the spring and summer of 2000." Now, (let's have a neutral point of view) in my experience, I've noted many users who simply skim through an article without reading its context and remove information. Why don't you change "the 45 year old Off wrote the book" to something like "45 year old author wrote the novel" (if people see "Off" like that, they often tend to remove it without noting it's the actual author's name). Feel free to reply.

I'll attempt to help anyway I can. A _talk 01:15, 14 November 2008 (UTC)

• Thanks for the review. I have made some edits [1]. If you are able to find any other sources that this article can use please let me know. One thing I would like some advice on: the book has been used as a reference for several academic papers. Should this be mentioned, and if so, where/how? I hinted at it with "While Arbour was pleased with her profile,[15]" referenced to a International Journal of Human Rights paper in which the author claims Arbour recommended the book as a reference. --maclean 05:01, 15 November 2008 (UTC)
  • Great work. I think you should leave it as it is; hidden in a reference was a good idea. However, if your insistent upon adding it see the Lead for The Catcher in the Rye; it's similar to your situation right now. A _talk 20:28, 15 November 2008 (UTC)

GA review (see here for criteria)

1. It is reasonably well written.

   a (prose): b (MoS):

2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.

   a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):

3. It is broad in its coverage.

   a (major aspects): b (focused):

4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.

   Fair representation without bias:

5. It is stable.

   No edit wars etc.:

6. It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.

   a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):

7. Overall:

   Pass/Fail:

Great work! a _talk 00:02, 17 November 2008 (UTC)