Talk:The Legend of Zelda: A Link Between Worlds/GA1

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Reviewer: ProtoDrake (talk · contribs) 18:02, 12 March 2016 (UTC)Reply


I'll take this. I'll have feedback on it in three days or so. If I'm not back by then, send me a message on my talk page. --ProtoDrake (talk) 18:02, 12 March 2016 (UTC)Reply

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  • They also don't require ammunition Change "don't" to "do not" per Wikipedia's prose guidelines.
  • Without a Triforce, Lorule crumbled away and entered a decrepit state. I think this could be altered a little, as "crumbled away" feels very final and at odds with the nature of Lorule as a ruined yet existent kingdom. Maybe change it to "Lorule decayed and became a ruined land". This is purely optional.
  • During this early phase, they had not considered developing a sequel to The Legend of Zelda: A Link to the Past, instead they were building a game around the theme of "communication". The second comma seems out of place, maybe change it to colon or semicolon.
  • Nintendo 3DS was growing even after the release of The Legend of Zelda: Ocarina of Time 3D, a remake of the Nintendo 64 title.[13] This sentence implies that the remake wasn't a success, which it was. Needs rephrasing.
  • To circumvent this issue, objects in the world were tilted at angle so that they were more visible in the top-down view.[16] Do you mean "tilted at an angle"?
  • this lead to the creation of the Yuga, the game antagonist, Remove "the" between "of" and "Yuga".
  • Maybe put quotes around the concern tours' names, or italics around the series name. Entirely optional.
  • A minor suggestion: if you want to archive the Iwata Asks interview, the UK version here is archived here in its entirety.

The1337gamer, that's what I saw in this article that gave me pause. Generally well written and an entertaining article. Putting on hold for now. --ProtoDrake (talk) 15:20, 14 March 2016 (UTC)Reply

@ProtoDrake: I think I've addressed these issues. Let me know if there is anything else. --The1337gamer (talk) 20:29, 14 March 2016 (UTC)Reply
@The1337gamer: I think this is alright now. A Pass. Thanks for the prompt response. --ProtoDrake (talk) 20:37, 14 March 2016 (UTC)Reply