Talk:The Call of the Simpsons/GA1
Latest comment: 15 years ago by 97198 in topic GA Review
GA Review
editEverything's looking pretty good right now. Here are a few suggestions for improvement:
- Homer and Bart leaves Marge and Lisa at the camping place -> plural; "Homer and Bart leave..."
- Homer and Bart falls into a fast-moving river -> same deal; "Homer and Bart fall..."
- WP:MOSTV#Plot section recommends that the plot synopses in episode article should be at around 200–500 words. This one here's only slightly over 500, but considering it's only a half-hour show, I think it could be decently trimmed.
- a conversation between the two about boys and other stuff -> "other stuff" is a little unencyclopedic; could we reword?
- Sam Simon thought "that's too funny to leave as a stage direction" and they added a dialogue to the scene -> how about "Sam Simon thought that it was 'too funny to leave...'"? And I'd say "they added dialogue" without the "a".
- like a lot of the other early guest stars on The Simpsons -> "a lot" is also kind of unencyclopedic; maybe go with "many of the other..."
- A lot of resources was spent on the backgrounds -> plural; "were spent"?
- "The Call of the Simpsons" finished 2nd place in the ratings that day - spell out "second"; maybe also "the ratings for that day".
- Nielsen rating -> Nielsen Rating
- Emmy Award in 1990 in "Outstanding Sound Mixing for a Comedy Series or a Special" -> "in 1990 in the category of..."
- TV.com is fine as an external link, but it cannot be used as a reference (ref 8) because it is not considered a WP:RELIABLE source as it is user-edited. Can you find another source to support the fact?
- Image:SimpsonsMPG 7G09.jpg is not low-resolution as it needs to be for fair use requirements. It should be scaled down to the size of the other image, or smaller.
I'll place the article on hold for a week, so good luck with making any changes - it's not far away! Just ask if you have any queries or issues. —97198 talk 01:03, 16 August 2008 (UTC)