Talk:The Buzz on Maggie/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: 23W (talk · contribs) 21:39, 13 August 2014 (UTC)

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)

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I'll take this. 23W 21:39, 13 August 2014 (UTC)

1. It is reasonably well written.

   a (prose, no copyvios, spelling and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):

   I've made the following copy edits; make sure to use {{ubl}} over line breaks per WP:UBLIST.

2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.

   a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):

3. It is broad in its coverage.

   a (major aspects): b (focused):

4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.

   Fair representation without bias:

5. It is stable.

   No edit wars, etc.:

6. It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.

   a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):

   I changed the Article parameter of File:Maggie and Rayna.jpg to match this article.

7. Overall:

   Pass/Fail:

Specific

• Found one instance of close paraphrasing (the first match); maybe reword from "location and prop design as well as background paint" to "prop design and location in addition to background paint".
• Per WP:LEADLENGTH, the lead should be shortened to one or two paragraphs.

Thankfully that's all that needs to be said for now. Good job; I hope you can work out these minor issues. 23W 20:34, 15 August 2014 (UTC)

I believe the issues have been addressed :) Pancake (talk) 07:02, 19 August 2014 (UTC)

Looking now I think it would be best to rearrange and split the production section into more logical paragraphs. How would you feel about this:

==Production==
[[File:JessicaDiCicco.jpg|thumb|upright|Newcomer [[Jessica DiCicco]] provided the voice of Maggie.]]
The concept of ''The Buzz on Maggie'' was created by [[Dave Polsky]], a former writer on ''[[Scary Movie 2]]'' and ''[[South Park]]''.<ref name="anmag">{{cite web|url=http://www.animationmagazine.net/tv/maggie-begins-buzzing-on-disney/|title=Maggie Begins Buzzing on Disney|work=[[Animation Magazine]]|date=June 17, 2005|last=Zahed|first=Ramin|archiveurl=http://www.webcitation.org/66bKWPbtQ|archivedate=April 1, 2012}}</ref> In an early interview for [[Animation World Network]], he explained that the series utilizes a playful aspect at adolescence, naming it "individuality vs. conformity".<ref name="awn"/> He said, "Maggie must learn how to pursue her agenda without alienating those she cares about. More often than not, Maggie learns that it is difficult to negotiate life on her terms without burning bridges."<ref name="awn">{{cite web|url=http://www.awn.com/news/television/disneys-buzz-maggie-flies-debutes-disney-channel|title=Disney's ''The Buzz on Maggie'' Flies Debutes on Disney Channel|last=Baisley|first=Sarah|date=June 17, 2005|work=[[Animation World Network]]|archiveurl=http://www.webcitation.org/66bL3GRFa|archivedate=April 1, 2012}}</ref> Wasson served as the director, and executively produced the series with Polsky, while Laura Perkins Brittain was the co-executive producer.<ref name="awn"/>

[[Dave Wasson]], the creator of the animated series ''[[Time Squad]]'', formed Maggie's character design and supported the use of [[Adobe Flash]] for animating the series. He told ''[[Animation Magazine]]'' that he was convinced Flash was a "good way to go" as he had had previous experience with the program, such as commercials and short films.<ref name="anmag"/> The series became Disney's first to be fully animated in Flash.<ref>{{cite news|url=http://pqasb.pqarchiver.com/washingtonpost/access/852665411.html?dids=852665411:852665411&FMT=ABS&FMTS=ABS:FT&type=current&date=Jun+12%2C+2005&author=&pub=The+Washington+Post&desc=ON+THIS+WEEK%3A+JUNE+12-18&pqatl=google|title=On this Week: June 12–18|work=[[The Washington Post]]|publisher=[[The Washington Post Company]]|date=June 12, 2005|accessdate=March 29, 2012|page=Y.03}}</ref> Following the cancellation of [[Kids' WB]]'s ''[[¡Mucha Lucha!]]'', many animators from that series were hired on ''The Buzz on Maggie''.<ref name="anmag"/> For the character designs, Wasson was heavily influenced by early cartoon shorts by [[Tex Avery]], [[Warner Bros.]] and [[Walt Disney]]. He noted that the characters in ''The Buzz on Maggie'' have "a lot of 1930s touches" and wear white gloves, which is a direct homage to the cartoon shorts.<ref name="anmag"/> The characters also have [[anime]]-inspired designs with oversized heads and large eyes.<ref name="am"/> Wasson stated that the concept of Maggie living in a dump gave him a "lot of visual opportunities".<ref name="anmag"/> [[Jorge Gutierrez (animator)|Jorge Gutierrez]] supervised the character design and Roman Laney supervised location and prop design in addition to background paint. The animation was done by [[Bardel Entertainment]] and [[Future Thought Productions]].<ref name="awn"/><ref>{{cite press release|url=http://www.prweb.com/releases/futurethoughtanimation/thatdarnjesus/prweb558627.htm|title=Future Thought Flashes onto the Big Screen at MIPCOM|date=October 5, 2007|location=San Jose, California|publisher=[[PR Web]]|accessdate=March 29, 2012}}</ref>

The series' theme song "Just the Way I Am" was composed by [[Bob Thiele Jr.]] and Dillon O'Brian, and performed by Canadian singer [[Skye Sweetnam]].<ref name="awn"/> The song is about pride, acceptance and empowerment.<ref name="ljw"/> [[Adam Berry]] did the show's [[film score|score]].<ref name="awn"/> [[Charlie Adler]] voice directed ''The Buzz on Maggie'' and helmed [[voice casting]] with Jamie Thomason.<ref name="awn"/> Newcomer [[Jessica DiCicco]] was cast as Maggie,<ref name="tpi"/> her first main role on a television series, preceding her role on ''[[Loonatics Unleashed]]'', which premiered the same year.<ref>{{cite web|url=http://www.animationmagazine.net/tv/loonatics-cast-unleashed/|title=http://www.animationmagazine.net/tv/loonatics-cast-unleashed/|title=''Loonatics'' Cast Unleashed|work=Animation Magazine|last=Ball|first=Ryan|date=June 6, 2005|accessdate=March 29, 2012}}</ref> The rest of the main cast included [[David Kaufman (actor)|David Kaufman]], [[Thom Adcox]], [[Cree Summer]], [[Brian Doyle-Murray]] and [[Susan Tolsky]].<ref name="awn"/> [[Tara Strong]] voiced Maggie's nemesis Dawn, among other minor characters.<ref name="awn"/> The series had a few guest voice actors, such as [[Laraine Newman]] and [[Jon Polito]].<ref>{{cite web|url=http://www.bcdb.com/cartoon/71769-Ladybugged.html|title=Ladybugged (2005)|publisher=[[Big Cartoon Database]]|accessdate=July 3, 2014}}</ref><ref>{{cite web|url=http://www.bcdb.com/cartoon/77553-Those_Pesky_Roaches.html|title=Those Pesky Roaches (2005)|publisher=Big Cartoon Database|accessdate=July 3, 2014}}</ref>

Otherwise, nice job. 23W 07:16, 19 August 2014 (UTC)

I think it's a great idea. It's been implemented now. Pancake (talk) 07:20, 19 August 2014 (UTC)

Thank you; pass! 23W 07:23, 19 August 2014 (UTC)