Talk:Svetlana-class cruiser/GA1

Latest comment: 7 years ago by Krishna Chaitanya Velaga in topic GA Review

GA Review

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Reviewer: Krishna Chaitanya Velaga (talk · contribs) 05:41, 4 December 2016 (UTC)Reply


Well constructed, will come back shorty. Regards, Krishna Chaitanya Velaga (talk • mail) 05:41, 4 December 2016 (UTC)Reply

  • Lead;
    • the remaining ship was scrapped -> the remainder was scrapped
    • Suggest removing "now" from "now renamed Profintern", because it is not the present, a bit awkward.
      • Remainder is generally plural.
  • Section 1;
    • 1912–16 to 1912–1916 per MOS:DATERANGE
    • 9,660,000 rubles; Perhaps add a conversion to USD for better understanding, also for 8,300,000 rubles
      • It's almost impossible to convert warship costs into modern dollars as they're capital costs and have massively exceeded inflation.
    • four gearedref Curtis-AEG-Vulkan steam turbines; this is bit confusing, there is a chance that user may take it for steam turbine having four gears instead the count of four turbines used. Reword it to avoid confusion.
      • I see your point, but I've been using this standard wording for years and nobody's ever questioned it before. Mainly, I think, that turbines with four gears would be written with a hyphen, forex: four-geared steam turbines.
    • In the infobox, it is mentioned that the boilers were water-tube boilers, mention the same in prose also.
      • Yarrow boilers are water-tube boilers so I've fixed the infobox.
    • maximum elevation was limited to 75°; + or -
    • Conversion for 76 millimeters and 25 millimeters
      • Both converted on first use.
    • Inconsistency in usage; 25-millimeter, 76 millimeters, 130-millimeter, 20 millimeters also some case exist in later paras
      • The hyphen is used for compound adjectives like 130-millimeter gun, or 25-millimeter armor plate, not for armor plates 25 millimeters thick, etc.
  • Section 2; Could links be made to the sister ship articles.
      • Sure.
  • Section 3;
    • Link Reval
      • Linked in the table above.
    • After "her overhaul in 1939", there is an unnecessary space before the reference.
    • 1941—42 to 1941–1942, en dash should be used for date ranges.
  • Section 5; Rohwer, Jürgen (2005) and Whitley, M. J. (1995) are never used for citations.
  • Infobox (out of GA criteria); Change ranges per MOS:DATERANGE
Regards, Krishna Chaitanya Velaga (talk • mail) 11:08, 5 December 2016 (UTC)Reply
@Sturmvogel 66: Any update on this? Regards, Krishna Chaitanya Velaga (talk • mail) 00:35, 17 December 2016 (UTC)Reply

All done, see if my changes have fixed the issues that you've identified.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 18:11, 23 December 2016 (UTC)Reply


GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)
  1. It is reasonably well written.
    a (prose, spelling, and grammar):   b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):  
  2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.
    a (reference section):   b (citations to reliable sources):   c (OR):   d (copyvio and plagiarism):  
  3. It is broad in its coverage.
    a (major aspects):   b (focused):  
  4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.
    Fair representation without bias:  
  5. It is stable.
    No edit wars, etc.:  
  6. It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
    a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales):   b (appropriate use with suitable captions):  
  7. Overall:
    Pass/Fail:  
    Regards, Krishna Chaitanya Velaga (talk • mail) 12:57, 25 December 2016 (UTC)Reply