Talk:Sunrise Celebration
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Fixing this article edit
To anyone interested: I've tried to do some basic work on Wikifying this article and tweaking the language, but it needs a lot more. For one thing, there are a lot of bold statements with no citation to support them, like "is committed to best sustainable practice", and "with many of the festival's ground-breaking policies now being used by other mainstream festivals across the UK".
There are also several statements that are vague as to their meaning, like "educational opportunities with eco-build", and "has a site-wide organic food and drink policy including alcohol"; what does this mean? A no-alcohol policy, or only organic alcohol, and do they forbid non-organic food and drink, or only the sale of such?
Hopefully someone who knows the event will go over the text with a fine tooth comb and make all the factual statements clear, delete unsupported fluff (like "has hosted stage productions from many of the best outfits in the alternative and underground festival scene"), define terms like "Chai Wallahs" and "eco-build", and provide citations for such statements as "That year Sunrise won The Guardian and Observer Newspapers' 'Ethical Travel Award' and The Green Parents 'Best Green Festival Award', and an 'Outstanding' mark with the organization 'A Greener Festival'." Rosencomet (talk) 21:17, 18 April 2012 (UTC)