Talk:Sleazy (song)/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Petergriffin9901 (talk • message • contribs • count • logs • email) 00:34, 2 September 2011 (UTC)

Lead

• While working on her EP -> the is more proper  Done
• she chose to enlist the help of producer Bangladesh so that she could give her music a tougher edge -> Better choice of wording available. Also, is he known for being touch?  Done
• Lyrically, the song talks about rich guys hitting on her that try to buy her attention. -> I know you can do better  Done
• deadbeat father and also his relationship with Kesha -> what's the connection? Any mention who the child is? Its too vague  Done

Partially done, i changed to friendship but his whole verse is just stupid, i went with what the source called it i cant elaborate further, sentence does its job fine. - (CK)Lakeshade - talk2me -

• that draws similar influence to the songs of -> confusing  Done

Background

• Is there a smaller picture of Andre available? That section break truly annoys me. Maybe you can crop it, honestly a third of the photo is black  Done
• While working on her album, Cannibal, -> we already established it's her album  Done
• Bangladesh. Bangladesh  Done
• In the lead, instead of writing vague terms like tougher, just quote "more gangster" ✗ Not done

Not a fan of quotes in the lead because they are suppose to need sources, which is completely contradictory. Both sentences get their points across. - (CK)Lakeshade - talk2me -

Then use more encyclopedic wording.--CallMeNathan • Talk2Me 03:44, 3 September 2011 (UTC)

• to Rap-Up how -> Rap-Up  Done
• a verse for the song. "I sent -> a verse for the song: "I sent  Done
• André 3000 was "one of my favorite musicians -> is Done

Composition

• rich men -> professional writing please; wealthy, affluent etc.  Done
• Vocally, the song follows previous singles footsteps -> you lost me there  Done
• The last sentence of the first paragraph needs tightening and is confusing. Re-read it aloud and you'll understand  Done
• The sample could use a better description, and should be sourced ✗ Not done

Source is in the composition, not needed here as its not something likely to be argued. - (CK)Lakeshade - talk2me -

Sample needs appropriate punctuation.--CallMeNathan • Talk2Me 03:44, 3 September 2011 (UTC)

• Link PopMatters  Done
• Pop Matters however, -> Pop Matters, however,  Done
• Bill Lamb noted -> who's he?  Done
• noted on Bangladesh's production that it -> weird wording  Done
• What relationship are you implying? Sexual, professional?  Done

Reception

• called "Sleazy" "apropos" -> I'm not sure what that means, and I'm not sure what you linked it to either ✗ Not done

The link is to different meanings of the word, in this use it means "Very appropriate to a particular situation", basically it means she gets her point across well. Thats why it is linked. - (CK)Lakeshade - talk2me - 03:16, 3 September 2011 (UTC)

• • Care to make is more of a sentence?--CallMeNathan • Talk2Me 03:43, 3 September 2011 (UTC)
• Link MTV  Done
• She didn't meet the song  Done
• with a positive review, she wrote -> poor transition  Done
• Link AOL radio  Done
• that the song followed similar form to that -> GR  Done
• commenting it is -> no flow  Done
• Sal Cinquemani commented -> who?  Done
• commented on "Sleazy" production  Done
• I don't understand the last sentence  Done
• Re-order the Canada sentence  Done
• Avoid choppy sentences  Done

References

• Several news cites do not use the cite news template; #s 8, 10, and many are missing publishers; #s 3, 4. Lastly, you should link only first time with references. That's all. Good luck, you have one week.--CallMeNathan • Talk2Me 00:34, 2 September 2011 (UTC)

✗ Not done Not a GA issue. I use cite "web" for all cites other than press released and album notes because of ongoing issues on which are to be used, some cause MOS issues so i stick with web for consistency and easier formatting. Other than that all issues have been addressed. - (CK)Lakeshade - talk2me - 03:16, 3 September 2011 (UTC)

CK, they need different templates.--CallMeNathan • Talk2Me 03:42, 3 September 2011 (UTC)

"[[Template:Cite web|This template is used to cite online sources in Wikipedia articles. {{Cite news}} can also be used when citing a news source; for general information about citations in Wikipedia articles, see Wikipedia:Cite sources.]]" Both are acceptable, i use cite web, not news. This isn't even a FA issue as there are many different ways to format. All GA issues now addressed. - (CK)Lakeshade - talk2me - 04:09, 3 September 2011 (UTC)

Last things

• There is some information lacking in the background section, including: official release date, label, A-side and formet. That should be explained somewhere other than the infobox, and backed by references. I think that's the last of them, but I'll have a last look after.--CallMeNathan • Talk2Me 12:56, 6 September 2011 (UTC)

 Done - (CK)Lakeshade - talk2me - 19:50, 6 September 2011 (UTC)