Talk:Shroud of Turin/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Nikkimaria (talk) 03:52, 23 October 2010 (UTC)

Hello! I will be reviewing this article for GA status. My review should be posted within the next few days. Cheers, Nikkimaria (talk) 03:52, 23 October 2010 (UTC)

Unfortunately, I feel this article is not yet at GA status. Please feel free to renominate once the below concerns have been addressed. Nikkimaria (talk) 17:25, 23 October 2010 (UTC)

Writing and formatting

• Generally speaking, don't wikilink dates or years
• Don't include "th" in dates
• ToC is too long - some of the shorter subsections should be merged
• Be consistent in using UK or US English - see WP:ENGVAR
• Lead should be condensed to 4 paragraphs per WP:LEAD
• Don't link the same term multiple times, especially not in close proximity
• Don't link common-knowledge terms like beard; do link less-familiar terms like Battle of Poitiers
• "French Knight" - why is "Knight" capitalized?
• 1532 is the 14th century, not the 15th
• "states that Apostle Peter found multiple pieces of burial cloth after the tomb was found open, strips of linen cloth for the body and a separate cloth for the head." - repetitive, grammar
• Be more consistent in when "Shroud" and other sometimes-proper nouns are capitalized
• "many of these marks" - what marks?
• "Anatomical forensics" section is quite listy, and could be reorganized to flow better
• Avoid one-sentence paragraphs and one-paragraph subsections
• Numbers under 10 should be spelled out
• "PhD Thesis" - PhD should be linked, thesis should be lower-case
• Use a consistent format for dates

Accuracy and verifiability

• {{dead link}} should be addressed
• Footnotes should appear after punctuation
• "(Piero Ugolotti, 1979)" - parenthetical citation is inconsistent with the footnotes that are otherwise used
• "in the 19th century it was first photographed during a public exhibition" - source?
• "The history of the shroud from the 15th century is well recorded. In 1532, the shroud suffered damage from a fire in a chapel of Chambéry, capital of the Savoy region, where it was stored. A drop of molten silver from the reliquary produced a symmetrically placed mark through the layers of the folded cloth" - source?
• "thereafter Church officials generally refrained from officially commenting on the photograph for almost half a century." - source?
• "Catholic devotions to the Holy Face of Jesus have been almost exclusively associated with the image on the shroud." - source?
• "Very few scientists (e.g. STURP and the Radiocarbon dating teams) have had direct access to the shroud or very small samples from it, and most theories have been proposed "long distance" by the analysis of images, or via secondary sources" - source?
• "McCrone (see painting hypothesis) identified these as containing iron oxide, theorizing that its presence was likely due to simple pigment materials used in medieval times. Other researchers, including Alan Adler identified the reddish stains as type AB blood and interpreted the iron oxide as a natural residue of hemoglobin." - source?
• "Similar results have been obtained by former stage magician and author Joe Nickell" - source?
• Use a consistent reference format
• All web citations need access dates and publishers
• All print citations need page numbers
• What makes this a reliable source? What about this? This?
• Don't repeat cited sources in External links
• Identical references should be combined - see WP:NAMEDREFS

Broad

• There's a bit too much detail on scientific perspective compared to the rest of the article

Neutrality

• Maintain a neutral and encyclopedic tone at all times

Stability

No issues noted

Images

• Shroud-of-Turin-1898-photo.jpg‎ - PD-old does not apply because the creator died only 69 years ago. Same problem with other Pia image
• Shroud_of_Turin_1898_poster.jpg - source does not provide evidence that author died more than 70 years ago - PD-old may not apply
• Discyellow.jpg - source does not support the assertion that permission for use on Wikipedia was granted
• Glebionis_February_2008-1.jpg - image description page contradicts image caption