Talk:Shelter (Finneas song)/GA1

Latest comment: 3 years ago by The Ultimate Boss in topic GA Review

GA Review

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Reviewer: Lazman321 (talk · contribs) 13:41, 17 September 2020 (UTC)Reply

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Criteria: 1a. prose ( ) 1b. MoS ( ) 2a. ref layout ( ) 2b. cites WP:RS ( ) 2c. no WP:OR ( ) 2d. no WP:CV ( )
3a. broadness ( ) 3b. focus ( ) 4. neutral ( ) 5. stable ( ) 6a. free or tagged images ( ) 6b. pics relevant ( )
Note: this represents where the article stands relative to the Good Article criteria. Criteria marked   are unassessed

Hello, it is me again. I will be reviewing this song for you. Lazman321 (talk) 13:41, 17 September 2020 (UTC)Reply

1. - Well Written

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a. - Prose

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  • In the sentence, Finneas cries as the dancers turn shove and toss him roughly around the riverbed. Add a "to" between the "turn" and "shove".
    • Add a space in the lead between "that" and "Avicii".
    • In the Background and composition section, in the phrase ...but has an undercurrent of trouble. "They call us lucky... remove the period and replace it with a "saying".

b. - Manual of Style

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  • There should be information in the lead about the song being originally written for Avicii to sing.
    • Move the phrase Finneas had heard that Avicii was looking for songs to produce. He wrote the song and sent it to Avicii's team. to before the phrase It was released by OYOY as the third single from the EP on August 22, 2019.
    • In between those two phrases, type It is unknown if Avicii ever listened to the song.
    • Add a "later" between "It was" and "released by".
  • In the lead, remove the phrase, A pop song, as it is not needed.

2. - Verifiable

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a. - List of references

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b. - Reliable sources

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c. - No original research

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3. - Broad

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a. - Main Aspects

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  • Are you sure that this is a single? It isn't listed as a single on iTunes or AllMusic. The citation for its release links to the music video on iTunes which can't be downloaded. If it was a single, it most likely would've charted in the USA.

user:Lazman321, it was a single. Finneas promoted Shelter and was featured in many reliable sources. The Ultimate Boss (talk) 06:30, 18 September 2020 (UTC)Reply

b. - Focused

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4. - Neutral

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5. - Stable

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6. - Illustrated

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b. - Relevant media

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  • The cover art of the EP put in the writing and composition section would be nice. Make sure you tag it.

user:Lazman321, I have done this in the past with other articles. It was reverted. I would do it, but other editors might get rid of it. The Ultimate Boss (talk) 06:31, 18 September 2020 (UTC)Reply

7. - Overall

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  • Really nice article. It is a short article, but all information that is available is in this article. I'll put this   On hold for 7 days this time because the improvements are easy. Lazman321 (talk) 17:02, 17 September 2020 (UTC)Reply

Lazman321, thanks again for a review! Lmk if anything else needs to be done. The Ultimate Boss (talk) 06:32, 18 September 2020 (UTC)Reply

Hey Lazman321, sorry it took so long to respond. I have been going through a lot and have just not lost my motivation to continue good articles. I will finish my review for your article today. You can go ahead and fail the review. The Ultimate Boss (talk) 11:16, 22 September 2020 (UTC)Reply