Talk:Sally Kellerman/GA3

Latest comment: 9 years ago by Jonas Vinther in topic GA Review

GA Review edit

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Reviewer: Jonas Vinther (talk · contribs) 16:03, 8 October 2014 (UTC)Reply


After glancing over the article, I can already tell now that the article will not pass for GA-status. I can also see that it's been nominated for GA-status three times this year. Because of this, I'm going to do an untraditional review and simply state what's wrong with the article instead of how I would normally review articles.

  • The article contains lots of grammar and sentence errors. If you are from a foreign country where learning English is not a priority or hugely important, and you would like some help with the grammar part, request help from from other editors who worked on this article or ask for a copyedit review at Wikipedia:Basic copyediting#Get help and meet other copyeditors.
  • This article is over-quoted. It contains five long quotes almost right after each other. Per WP:QUOTE and WP:LONGQUOTE you should use quotes as less you can, and they should not be long, as the quotes in this article is. Also, some of the quotes are un-sourced.
  • The article has lots of un-sourced material and use sources that appears to be unreliable (YouTube, IMDb) and too closely associated with the article (Sally's personal website). Many of the sources listed contain wrong reference text and some contain none at all and are referenced simply like this http://highfallsfilmfestival.com/. Lastly, this article has a "Bibliography" section which listed Sally's autobiography, which is fine, but when refereeing to the book you should use Harvard references like this "Sally 2013, p. 20" instead of this "Kellerman, Sally (2013). Read My Lips: Stories of a Hollywood Life. Weinstein Books. p. 20. 978-1-60286-167-1."
  • The "Filmography" section, which is two tables of Sally's film and television appearances, are longer than the actual body text of the article. I suggest either replacing the tables, which are also un-sourced, with a list of her most famous or acclaimed appearances. Also, when an actor's filmography is this long it should have an article of its own, like Tom Hanks filmography and simply have a link to that on their main article.

I hope all these points and suggestions help and I'm sorry the article had to fail it's third GA-nomination. I will happily review the article properly and again when it's improved. Best of luck. Jonas Vinther (speak to me!) 16:25, 8 October 2014 (UTC)Reply