Talk:Sailor Mouth/GA1

Latest comment: 11 years ago by EditorE in topic GA Review

GA Review

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Reviewer: EditorE (talk · contribs) 16:13, 3 July 2013 (UTC) Alright. I going to review this, so here we go.Reply

Infobox
  • Looks good
    • Thanks! :)
Lead
  • The second paragraph in the lead just isn't good on itself should be with the first paragraph in the lead.
  • "The episode received positive reviews from television critics," I don't see a lot of critical reviews in the Reception section, other than the About.com source listing the episode as one of the Top 10 spongebob episodes, so I don't think we should say that it got reviews from critics.
    •   Done
Plot
  • "he reads some of the words written on the dumpster." Wait, what dumpster? It's best if we didn't say "on the dumpster".
  • All the "swear" and "swears" in this section should be changed to "swear word" or "swear words".
  • "he reads some of the words written on the dumpster. SpongeBob then asks Patrick what it is and Patrick says that the word is a "sentence enhancer."" What's "it"? One of the words that is a swear word or the words on the dumpster Spongebob read? We should also introduce that some of the words Patrick and Spongebob said were a swear word, before saying that Spongebob "walks into the Krusty Krab and says the swear [this should be "Swear word"] to Patrick and then over the intercom."
  • "Mr. Krabs stops their gibberish explanations, and takes SpongeBob and Patrick outside and returns with cans of paint." How about you say that Mr. Krabs "makes them paint as punishment" instead of "returns with cans of paint."
    •   Done
Production
  • "Series creator Stephen Hillenburg have" should be "Series creator Stephen Hillenburg has".
    •   Done
  • "Tibbitt later reprised his role in the third season episode "Mid-Life Crustacean";[2] however, for reasons unknown, Tibbitt was replaced by SpongeBob SquarePants cast member Sirena Irwin for the episode fourth season episode "Enemy In-Law" and each of Mrs. Krabs' subsequent appearances.[3][4][5]" Whoa, Whoa, Whoa, Whoa, Whoa, Whoa, Whoa! Do we really need to go into more detail on the character rather than the episode? This part of the article should be removed.
    •   Done
Reception
  • "In a report titled Wolves in Sheep's Clothing," This should be :According to a report titled Wolves in Sheep's Clothing,"
    •   Done
References;
  • Ref #1: The date of the article should be mention in this citation.
    •   Done
  • Ref #7: The date of the article should be mention in this citation.
    •   Done

Hopefully, the issues will be addressed so I look at this article again and see if I can pass it yet. Great work, though. EditorE (talk) 16:13, 3 July 2013 (UTC)Reply

Thank you so much EditorE on taking time to review this article to GA. I hope the article is all in shape to pass your and, of course, the GA standards. Thanks again and have a nice day! :) Mediran (tc) 10:53, 4 July 2013 (UTC)Reply
Your welcome. Passing, here we go! EditorE (talk) 14:31, 4 July 2013 (UTC)Reply