Talk:SMS Bremen/GA1
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Reviewer: ChrisGualtieri (talk · contribs) 16:02, 12 December 2012 (UTC)
I'll be reviewing this soon. ChrisGualtieri (talk) 16:02, 12 December 2012 (UTC)
Let's begin.
Images check out as okay as they are public domain.
"In early 1912, Bremen was assigned to a goodwill cruise to the United States, along with the battlecruiser Moltke, the only German capital ship to ever visit the US, and the light cruiser Stettin." Should be cited itself because it has a claim on the Moltke which seems a bit out of place in this article. I don't even know why that is important in this article. I'd cut that 'trivia' bit out as it jars the prose.
- Sounds fine to me.
"On 17 December 1915, she ran into a Russian minefield and struck a pair of mines off Windau and sank. The majority of her crew died in the sinking, with 250 men killed. The torpedo boat V191 was sunk as well.[3][13]" Two inline citations for the last line? I think one is just out of place. I'd cite the first two sentences and probably omit the V191 reference as unnecessary. While interesting, it detracts from what is the final line of the article by referring to another ship.
- I rearranged the sentences so the V191 bit occurs further up. And the two citations cover the preceding couple of sentences, which are sort of a mash of the two books' information. Parsecboy (talk) 11:40, 21 December 2012 (UTC)
Everything else looks fine. Just going to put it on hold, I don't have the material to fix the last paragraph myself. ChrisGualtieri (talk) 04:53, 21 December 2012 (UTC)
Passed. ChrisGualtieri (talk) 14:50, 23 December 2012 (UTC)