Talk:Ring Off (song)/GA1

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Reviewer: IndianBio (talk · contribs) 17:10, 1 June 2015 (UTC)

• A midtempo reggae-tinged ballad which is --> A midtempo reggae-tinged ballad, which is

• Why? I don't understand this. Simon (talk) 08:48, 3 June 2015 (UTC)

• on November 24, 2014 containing a disc on the --> on November 24, 2014, containing a disc on the

• Done Simon (talk) 08:48, 3 June 2015 (UTC)

• Wikilink "7/11" the first time

• Done Simon (talk) 08:48, 3 June 2015 (UTC)

• My main qualm about the composition section is there is no info about the writing/producing/recording team behind the song, which is easily available from the booklet

• Done Simon (talk) 08:48, 3 June 2015 (UTC)

• Lyrically, "Ring Off" addresses the end of a marriage between Beyoncé's parents. --> Lyrically, the song addresses the end of a marriage between Beyoncé's parents.

• Done Simon (talk) 08:48, 3 June 2015 (UTC)

• At a part of the song, --> Please mentione where, the beginning, the bridge? the intermediate verses?

• Done Simon (talk) 08:48, 3 June 2015 (UTC)

• as a hybrid of "XO" and "Caribbean vibes" of "Standing on the Sun" and "Grown Woman" --> This is not clear, we need to have what is the hybrid consisting off? Like what elements of "XO" is hybrid with SOTS and GW

• Done Simon (talk) 08:48, 3 June 2015 (UTC)

• Beyoncé's previous titles "Schoolin' Life" (2011) and "XO" (2013) --> Titles is an incorrect usage, refers to Yonka being called with those names, while they are actually song names, please change

• Done Simon (talk) 08:48, 3 June 2015 (UTC)

• However, Zoladz complimented on the song's lyrics, calling the song "one of the most candidly personal songs Beyoncé’s ever released. --> repetition of "song"

• Done Simon (talk) 08:48, 3 June 2015 (UTC)

• It appeared on the French SNEP Singles Chart at number 110 --> Start with "Ring Off" appeared on the French SNEP Singles Chart at number 110

• Done Simon (talk) 08:48, 3 June 2015 (UTC)

• The song also peaked at number 5 on the Bubbling Under Hot 100 chart, a chart which acts as a 25-song extension to the Hot 100 ---> Very lame, please change it to "The song also peaked at number 5 on the US Bubbling Under Hot 100, a chart which acts as a 25-song extension to the Billboard Hot 100".

• Done Simon (talk) 08:48, 3 June 2015 (UTC)

• Why not merge the references from those of the {{singlechart}} template from the Charts section? Why use separate reference at all in the chart performance for Lescharts, Dutchcharts?

• It is already merged I think. Simon (talk) 08:48, 3 June 2015 (UTC)

• I corrected it. —Indian:BIO ^{[ ChitChat ]} 13:30, 3 June 2015 (UTC)

Overall ok job, on hold for seven days. —Indian:BIO ^{[ ChitChat ]} 08:22, 2 June 2015 (UTC)

Passing it now, good job Simon. —Indian:BIO ^{[ ChitChat ]} 13:30, 3 June 2015 (UTC)