Talk:Ricky Riccitelli/GA3

GA Review

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Reviewer: Gonzo fan2007 (talk · contribs) 14:30, 20 March 2019 (UTC)

Good Article review progress box Criteria: 1a. prose () 1b. MoS () 2a. ref layout () 2b. cites WP:RS () 2c. no WP:OR () 2d. no WP:CV () 3a. broadness () 3b. focus () 4. neutral () 5. stable () 6a. free or tagged images () 6b. pics relevant () Note: this represents where the article stands relative to the Good Article criteria. Criteria marked are unassessed

Lead

• "first XV" - this should be explained, either with a footnote or a link. Could "XV" just be replaced with the more generic "team"?
• You don't need the citations in the lead per MOS:LEADCITE. « Gonzo fan2007 (talk) @ 20:22, 25 March 2019 (UTC)

Early life

• "Riccitelli excelleed in sports" - spelling error
• "his school's first XI" - again, it would help to explain what XV is somewhere in the article.
• "in seven out of eight games including, their historic win" - the comma needs to come after "games" « Gonzo fan2007 (talk) @ 20:25, 25 March 2019 (UTC)

Professional career

• "While there was interest from other provincial unions for Riccitelli, he signed a two-year deal with Hawke's Bay after coach Craig Philpott confirmed the signing in May 2015." - recommend rewriting to "Although there was interest from other provincial unions for Riccitelli, he ended up signing a two-year deal with Hawke's Bay under coach Craig Philpott." - the whole "signing with a team after the coach confirmed the signing" sounds weird.
• "playing the season's two out of three pre-season Ranfurly Shield matches" - no need for "the season's" and then add "the" before "three"
• "progress though as a starting loosehead prop" - I have no idea what a loosehead prop is. Maybe link to Rugby_union_positions#Prop
• "making it a seasons personal best." - should be "season's"
• "seasons, signing a two-year deal." - add "him to" « Gonzo fan2007 (talk) @ 23:28, 25 March 2019 (UTC)

Statistics

• No comments. « Gonzo fan2007 (talk) @ 20:20, 25 March 2019 (UTC)

Images

• No images. « Gonzo fan2007 (talk) @ 20:20, 25 March 2019 (UTC)

References

• Ref 3 does not look like a reliable source. « Gonzo fan2007 (talk) @ 20:31, 25 March 2019 (UTC)

Comments

Kidsoljah, I have renominated the article for you and will review it. Please confirm that you are available over the next few days to address any further edits or issues that arise. « Gonzo fan2007 (talk) @ 14:30, 20 March 2019 (UTC)

Yes, I’ll be available. Thanks Kidsoljah (talk) 08:36, 21 March 2019 (UTC)

I'll finish up the last section in the next day or so. « Gonzo fan2007 (talk) @ 20:31, 25 March 2019 (UTC)

Kidsoljah, I think that is all my comments. Will place on hold. « Gonzo fan2007 (talk) @ 23:28, 25 March 2019 (UTC)

Gonzo_fan2007, I have fixed all of your comments. Just the first XV comment is the hardest to fix. I've added a link directing it to a section of the Francis Douglas article. "the top representative team in secondary school" is the best explanation I can give to narrate what "first XV" means. If it would be easier to change it to "team", then let it be changed. Thanks Kidsoljah (talk) 21:27, 26 March 2019 (UTC)