Talk:Rebecca Chambers/GA1

Latest comment: 2 years ago by BloatedBun in topic GA Review

GA Review

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Reviewer: Kaleeb18 (talk · contribs) 02:22, 5 June 2022 (UTC)Reply


I'll be taking this one. ― Kaleeb18TalkCaleb 02:22, 5 June 2022 (UTC)Reply

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1. Well-written:
  1a. the prose is clear, concise, and understandable to an appropriately broad audience; spelling and grammar are correct.
  • credited as "Linda", and voiced – no comma before and
  • who also served as Capcom's official spokeswoman for the game in Japan and voiced by Canadian actress, Riva Di Paola – add a comma after Japan and remove the comma before Riva
  • Her design were also adjusted when she lost her – either design is supposed to be plural or were is supposed to be changed to was
  • pairs her with fellow STARS Bravo team member – put periods around the letters in STARS
  • English actress, Erin Cahill and Japanese actress, Ami Koshimizu – the commas before there names are not needed
  • She has become a professor teaching at a – put In the play at the beginning of the sentence and remove has and replace became with is
  • Edge listed Rebecca, as "strong, – remove comma before as
  • She was included among the 112 most important female characters in games by Thilo Bayer of PC Games Hardware – it sounds like the 112 games includes games that are only made by Thilo Bayer of PC Games Hardware
  • Matt Cundy of GamesRadar – GamesRadar+
  1b. it complies with the Manual of Style guidelines for lead sections, layout, words to watch, fiction, and list incorporation.
  • In the original Resident Evil, Rebecca was portrayed – change to is portrayed
  • PlayStation Official Magazine, has claimed that – claimed is a word to watch and it makes it sound like the writer is incorrect in what they say (also you don't need has).
  • females in the Resident Evil franchise, claiming that – same thing here
  • sixth best character in the series, claiming that – yet again
  • Brittany Vincent of SyFy claimed that Rebecca – this one too
  • least favorite female character in the series, claiming that – ditto (I'm running out of ways to say this)
2. Verifiable with no original research:
  2a. it contains a list of all references (sources of information), presented in accordance with the layout style guideline.
  • In ref 16 avoid all caps per MOS:ALLCAPS
  • Change GamesRadar to GamesRadar+
  2b. reliable sources are cited inline. All content that could reasonably be challenged, except for plot summaries and that which summarizes cited content elsewhere in the article, must be cited no later than the end of the paragraph (or line if the content is not in prose).
  • Accoding to reliable source notice board Mobygames is not a reliable source
  • Resident Evil Database does not look like a reliable source unless its a primary website
  • What makes Playstation Universe, Digital News Asia, PC Games Hardware, and GameZone reliable
Removed all of them except GameZone, it is 100percent reliable. It has been used in multiple GA articles. BloatedBun (talk) 11:40, 6 June 2022 (UTC)Reply
  2c. it contains no original research.
  • Spotchecks for refs 4, 12, 20, 29, 34, 38, 39, 40, 44, and 46 are all good
  2d. it contains no copyright violations or plagiarism.
  • This isn't necessary, but I would consider trimming some of the quotes
  • The copyvio detector only picks up a 37.9% violation possibility
3. Broad in its coverage:
  3a. it addresses the main aspects of the topic.
  3b. it stays focused on the topic without going into unnecessary detail (see summary style).
  4. Neutral: it represents viewpoints fairly and without editorial bias, giving due weight to each.
  5. Stable: it does not change significantly from day to day because of an ongoing edit war or content dispute.
6. Illustrated, if possible, by media such as images, video, or audio:
  6a. media are tagged with their copyright statuses, and valid non-free use rationales are provided for non-free content.
  6b. media are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions.
  7. Overall assessment.
Kaleeb18 I believed I've addressed all your concerns. "GameZone" is for sure reliable and has been used on multiple GA articles. BloatedBun (talk) 11:58, 6 June 2022 (UTC)Reply
Yes GameZone is a reliable source after doing more research. ― Kaleeb18TalkCaleb 17:23, 6 June 2022 (UTC)Reply
Thanks for the review. Thanks. A related GA nominee article is Ada Wong. BloatedBun (talk) 21:38, 6 June 2022 (UTC)Reply