Talk:Reaganing/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: 97198 (talk) 14:58, 16 November 2010 (UTC)

The article is looking really good at the moment, and I only found a few minor things to nitpick:

• According to the Nielsen Media Research - can we lose the "the"?
  • Removed. --  ThinkBlue  (Hit BLUE) 16:22, 16 November 2010 (UTC)
• The repeated takes to accommodate Tracy are what is holding the traffic up - I haven't seen the episode, but can you clarify why exactly this is affecting the traffic?
  • The commercial shoot is blocking off a street, in which Jack and Liz are, and because Tracy can't remember his line the production is getting delayed thus the traffic jam occurring. Or in other words, "Tracy becomes the new spokesperson for the 'Boys & Girls Club' but has difficulty remembering his lines while filming a commercial. The commercial is filmed at a city block, but the director begins to panic as they don't have enough funds to keep the city block closed. Tracy needs to get his lines right, and quickly."
• Carvel thanked the show for referencing them in the episode despite making them "the butt of of the joke" and that the Carvel subplot "was pretty funny stuff!" - seems to be a verb missing before "that"
  • I think I got it.
• Penton revealed that she auditioned - misspelling of "Ponton"; also, "revealed" sounds a bit sensationalist for such a small detail
  • Oh snap, I can't believe I missed that. I fixed the misspelling and removed revealed.

I'll place the review on hold for a week to give you time to make any changes before it gets passed (not that it will take you long). Great work, as always. :) 97198 (talk) 14:58, 16 November 2010 (UTC)

Thanks for the review, 97198, I appreciate it very much. I hope I addressed all your concerns, if not I'll do whatever it takes. --  ThinkBlue  (Hit BLUE) 16:22, 16 November 2010 (UTC)

Thanks for making those changes, and for the clarification about Tracy's commercial, but would you be able to work that into the plot in the article? 97198 (talk) 08:12, 17 November 2010 (UTC)

Sorry for my late response, have been dealing with computer problems. Anyways, I did my best with the Tracy plot, IDK if it reads well or whatever. If not, let me know and I'll try to fix it. --  ThinkBlue  (Hit BLUE) 17:07, 22 November 2010 (UTC)

That looks great, so I'll pass the GAN. Nice work! 97198 (talk) 05:08, 23 November 2010 (UTC)