Talk:Randy Ambrosie/GA1

Latest comment: 6 years ago by MWright96 in topic GA Review

GA Review

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Reviewer: MWright96 (talk · contribs) 10:04, 12 November 2017 (UTC)Reply


It's me again! Taking on this review. MWright96 (talk) 15:22, 12 November 2017 (UTC)Reply

  1. It is reasonably well written.
    a (prose):   b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):  
  2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.
    a (reference section):   b (citations to reliable sources):   c (OR):  
  3. It is broad in its coverage.
    a (major aspects):   b (focused):  
  4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.
    Fair representation without bias:  
  5. It is stable.
    No edit wars, etc.:  
  6. It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
    a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales):   b (appropriate use with suitable captions):  
  7. Overall:
    Pass/Fail:  

Infobox

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  • Multiple facts in the infobox are unsourced, like the DOB, POB, height, and weight
I think these come from the The Canadian Pro Football Encyclopedia, @BU Rob13: WikiOriginal-9 (talk) 21:44, 16 November 2017 (UTC)Reply
Yes, the entire infobox in all of my Canadian football biographies are sourced to the CPFE. ~ Rob13Talk 22:06, 16 November 2017 (UTC)Reply

Early career

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  • "In 1984, he was named an All-Canadian." - maybe you could explain what an All-Canadian is to non-football experts like myself   Done
  • "By February 1985, he was considered likely to be selected in the first round of the 1985 CFL Draft." - if there anything to say whom Ambrosie was likely to be selected for the first round of the 85 draft?   Done

Calgary Stampeders

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  • Wikilink Calgary Stampeders since it is the first time it is mentioned in the main body of the prose   Done
  • I'm guessing that rookie of the year is the CFL's Most Outstanding Rookie Award? If so please added a wikilink   Done

Toronto Argonauts

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  • Added a wikilink to Toronto Argonauts and right guard   Done
  • "The continued injury issues didn't affect the offensive line's success on the field," - no contractions please   Done

Edmonton Eskimos

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  • "The Argonauts had not originally planned to trade Ambrosie, but Ambrosie requested to be traded to a team closer to where his wife worked." - reptition of Ambrosie   Done
  • "The Eskimos met the Stampeders in the West Final for the fourth season in the row" - reword to The Eskimos met the Stapeders in the West Final for the fourth consecutive season   Done

Adminstrative roles

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  • "On June 29, 2017, Ambrosie was named to be the 14th CFL commissioner, succeeding Jeffrey Orridge." - should be reworded toOn June 29, 2017 Ambrosie was name the 14th CFL commissioner, succeeding Jeffrey Orridge.   Done
  • "The move was made official on July 4." - perhaphs this could be reworded to say The move was made offical five days later.   Done
I slightly changed this section of the article. WikiOriginal-9 (talk) 23:10, 16 November 2017 (UTC)Reply
The change looks fine and thanks for correcting a factual error that I overlooked. MWright96 (talk) 11:14, 17 November 2017 (UTC)Reply

References

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  • References 39, 40 and 46 are bare urls   Done

Going to place this review on hold until everything has been dealt with. MWright96 (talk) 15:22, 12 November 2017 (UTC)Reply

I'm helping Rob with his reviews, so I'll get to this if he doesn't. WikiOriginal-9 (talk) 10:43, 16 November 2017 (UTC)Reply
@WikiOriginal-9: Thank you for taking on the review for Rob. Am more than happy to make this article a GA. MWright96 (talk) 11:14, 17 November 2017 (UTC)Reply