Talk:Raffles Place MRT station/GA1
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Reviewer: Steelkamp (talk · contribs) 14:49, 16 April 2022 (UTC)
Hello. I will be reviewing this article. I aim to complete the review within the next few days. If you would like to return the favour, I have several good article nominations active right now (including some railway stations), which you can find at WP:GAN. Good luck. Steelkamp (talk) 14:49, 16 April 2022 (UTC)
Good article criteria edit
Well written edit
- I've taken the liberty of changing the lead slightly as to mention the country in the first sentence, as it is one of the most important pieces of information. Steelkamp (talk) 15:12, 17 April 2022 (UTC)
- As you can see, I decided to do many changes myself. Steelkamp (talk) 15:46, 17 April 2022 (UTC)
- What does "authorities' records" mean? Steelkamp (talk) 15:46, 17 April 2022 (UTC)
- What are "ground support systems"? Steelkamp (talk) 15:46, 17 April 2022 (UTC)
An air lift was used to remove the mud slurry along with a tremie pipe at the bottom of the drilling hole.
– Does this meanAn air lift and a tremie pipe at the bottom of the drilling hole were used to remove the mud slurry.
? Steelkamp (talk) 15:46, 17 April 2022 (UTC)- When is says "These methods", what is it referring to? The breaking apart of the boulders? Steelkamp (talk) 15:46, 17 April 2022 (UTC)
- The explosives could me mentioned in the same sentence as the other methods of breaking the boulders. Steelkamp (talk) 15:46, 17 April 2022 (UTC)
- Well, the source kind of expounded on it a little as a rather dangerous method, so it's kind of a separate sentence.--10:02, 19 April 2022 (UTC)
- "DTH machines" is plural at first, then singular. Should be consistent. Steelkamp (talk) 15:46, 17 April 2022 (UTC)
with the machine's inability to discharge the drill cuttings (mud slurry).
– Should this instead bedue to the machine's inability to discharge the drill cuttings (mud slurry).
? Steelkamp (talk) 15:47, 17 April 2022 (UTC)
newer buildings were constructed
– Who constructed the new buildings. Private enterprise or the government? Steelkamp (talk) 15:47, 17 April 2022 (UTC)- "Historical reasons" sounds a bit vague. Is there a reason in particular? Is that just the name that the area has been known as? Steelkamp (talk) 04:27, 19 April 2022 (UTC)
- Article says it opened
when the line extension to Outram Park station was completed.
As it was an extension, was there a previous section already opened? From what station was the extension from? It also saysPhase I MRT segment
earlier in the article. Could you provide some clarity. Was that segment the first segment of the entire system or is it just the extension? Steelkamp (talk) 04:27, 19 April 2022 (UTC) Raffles Place station is one of the two paired cross-platform interchanges
– This is confusing. Does it mean one of two stations which are paired cross-platform interchanges? Or one of the stations which are two paired cross-platform interchanges. I don't even know what this means. It should be clearer to the reader. Steelkamp (talk) 04:27, 19 April 2022 (UTC)Like the adjacent City Hall stations
– Should this beCity Hall station
? Steelkamp (talk) 04:27, 19 April 2022 (UTC)From 28 October 1989, it began to serve the NSL when MRT operations were split.
– This kinda implies that the station didn't serve the EWL, but from reading the rest of the article, that is not the case. Footnote doesn't clear it up either. Replace it with something like this:From 28 October 1989, it began to serve the NSL as well as the EWL when MRT operations were split.
Steelkamp (talk) 04:27, 19 April 2022 (UTC)- Regarding the above point, as its the first mention of the NSL and the EWL in the body, they should be spelled out in full. Steelkamp (talk) 04:27, 19 April 2022 (UTC)
The concrete frame was designed to prevent any corrosion and floatation of the tunnels.
– How about {[tq|The concrete frame was designed to prevent any corrosion or floatation of the tunnels.}} Steelkamp (talk) 04:40, 19 April 2022 (UTC)Due to requirements by the Ministry of Environment ensuring that the work site does not occupy more than 40% of the river width
– How aboutDue to requirements from the Ministry of Environment that the work site does not occupy more than 40% of the river width
Steelkamp (talk) 04:40, 19 April 2022 (UTC)the work would proceed in three stages.
– Why doesn't it just saythe work proceeded in three stages.
Steelkamp (talk) 04:40, 19 April 2022 (UTC)
Verifiable with no original research edit
- Sources all appear to be reliable. I have yet to check whether article text lines up with sources. Steelkamp (talk) 15:12, 17 April 2022 (UTC)
Broad in its coverage edit
Neutral edit
Stable edit
Illustrated, if possible edit
- Image layout is appropriate. Steelkamp (talk) 15:12, 17 April 2022 (UTC)
- It's reasonable to believe you took those images yourself and images are appropriately tagged with their licence so copyright is fine. Captions are also good. Steelkamp (talk) 15:12, 17 April 2022 (UTC)
- I of course recommend alt text for images although it is not a requirement for GAN, it is a requirement for articles in general. Steelkamp (talk) 04:27, 19 April 2022 (UTC)
General edit
I will put this on hold. I will check all the sources after the prose improvements are done. Steelkamp (talk) 04:40, 19 April 2022 (UTC)