Talk:Pueblo speech/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Tkbrett (talk · contribs) 01:25, 28 May 2021 (UTC)

Hi, I will be giving this article a go. Tkbrett (✉) 01:25, 28 May 2021 (UTC)

Good Article review progress box Criteria: 1a. prose () 1b. MoS () 2a. ref layout () 2b. cites WP:RS () 2c. no WP:OR () 2d. no WP:CV () 3a. broadness () 3b. focus () 4. neutral () 5. stable () 6a. free or tagged images () 6b. pics relevant () Note: this represents where the article stands relative to the Good Article criteria. Criteria marked are unassessed

Lead

• Good.

Background

• "In a "crusade" that has been described as...": fix passive voicing here. Should be "In a "crusade" that historian Leroy G. Dorsey describes as..." or the name of whoever is doing the describing.
• First mention of Pueblo should specify Pueblo, Colorado. Also, should be linked.
• Every sentence in the opening paragraph uses the word "Pueblo", which is distracting. It can be cut from the second and fourth sentence: A contemporary newspaper described the crowd as "a great many"... and When Wilson arrived, he visited...

Speech

• "in memory of soldiers who died during World War I.": Does the source specify which ones? Presumably it was just American soldiers.
  • Unfortunately, source doesn't specify at all.
• More passive voicing at Wilson was introduced by Alva Adams, a former Governor of Colorado. -> Former Colorado Governor Alva Adams introduced Wilson.
• Theodore Roosevelt needs an introduction (e.g. former US President)

Legacy and analysis

• "feels that it both": both refers to two things, but you list three.
• Passive voicing: A fragment of the speech was included in the play "Mr. Wilson's Peace of Mind" by Mark Stein. -> Mark Stein's play "Mr. Wilson's Peace of Mind" includes a fragment of the speech.

References

• The GA criteria doesn't require you to have the same referencing format across the entire page, but WP:GANOT does mention that you should provide a page number when directly quoting something. Reference 4 (Dorsey 1999) only provides the page range 107–135 of the journal article. If you move it into the Bibliography then you will be able to provide a specific page number for this citation.

General comments and verdict

• copyvio score is 42.9% against a transcript of the speech. The next highest is 23.7%, indicating a violation is unlikely.
• Image is PD.
• Eddie891:  On hold until the above issues are fixed. I really enjoy these types of articles – ones that are both focused and exhaustive on a very specific event. A nice little page. Tkbrett (✉) 18:11, 28 May 2021 (UTC)

  Thanks, Tkbrett what do you think now? I've just gone directly with your suggestions, except in the one place I responded to you. Eddie891 ^Talk _Work 00:50, 29 May 2021 (UTC)

  ✓ Pass: Eddie891, it all looks and reads great. As that one source doesn't specify it's best to leave it as is. Great work! Tkbrett (✉) 01:28, 29 May 2021 (UTC)