Talk:Pretty Please (song)/GA1

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Reviewer: K. Peake (talk · contribs) 09:37, 13 July 2022 (UTC)Reply

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Criteria: 1a. prose ( ) 1b. MoS ( ) 2a. ref layout ( ) 2b. cites WP:RS ( ) 2c. no WP:OR ( ) 2d. no WP:CV ( )

3a. broadness ( ) 3b. focus ( ) 4. neutral ( ) 5. stable ( ) 6a. free or tagged images ( ) 6b. pics relevant ( )

Note: this represents where the article stands relative to the Good Article criteria. Criteria marked are unassessed

I will start this today, though it won't be done until at least tomorrow. --K. Peake 09:37, 13 July 2022 (UTC)Reply

Infobox looks good!
Add a comma after second studio album
"and the song's producer" → "and the sole producer"
Add a sentence between the writing/production and genres one about how the song was created
"is the opposite. In the lyrics," → "is the opposite; in the lyrics,"
Remove the usage of very per this not being sourced in the body
"reached number 48, 79 and" → "reached numbers 48, 79 and"
"was awarded a gold certification from" → "was awarded a gold certification in Canada from"
"remix album Club Future Nostalgia." → "remix album, Club Future Nostalgia (2020)."
Mention that the festival was in 2022 and use "that same year" later on in the sentence

Img looks good!
Pipe mixed to Audio mixing (recorded music)
Pipe mastered to Mastering (audio)
"a bunch of music" I don't think this is appropriate language for Wiki
Wikilink bassline
"before the chorus. Kirkpatrick used" → "before the chorus and Kirkpatrick used" with the pipe
Wikilink tempo
Pipe percussion to Percussion instrument
"lag a bit" is this really appropriate language?
"He used LFO tool" → "Kirkpatrick used LFO tool"
"Kirkpatrick used the LFO tool to make" → "The tool also had the purpose of making"
"He also used a" → "Kirkpatrick further used a"
Pipe snare to Snare drum
Img looks good!
"decided to leave it in" → "decided to leave the instrument in"
"he wanted to make it" → "the producer wanted to make it"
"in the hook. Kirkpatrick used an" → "in the hook and used an"
"he included a part from" → "the producer included a section from"
Wikilink melodyne per MOS:LINK2SECT

Remove wikilink on midtempo
Remove wikilink on tempo
[12][13][14][15][9] is too many refs grouped together, so move some around to the appropriate areas of the sentence
[19] should only be invoked once in the sentence
Wikilink synthesizer
"for stress-reliving" → "for stress-relieving" on the audio sample text
"the live bass. This chorus also introduces a beeping sounds." → "the live bass while beeping sounds are introduced."
Wikilink tambourine
I don't think spine-tingling is very neutral here
"when she sings" → "when Lipa sings"
"but realizing that unlike them." what does this mean? Please clarify...
"sums up the song's" → "sum up the song's"

"on Future Nostalgia saying" → "on Future Nostalgia, saying"
"called it a "slinky" monster and stated it's" → "called the song a "slinky" monster and stated it is"
"complimented "airtight" and" → "complimented the "airtight" and"
"Writing for, Pitchfork Anna Gaca noted" → "For Pitchfork, Anna Gaca noted"
Pipe ballad to Sentimental ballad
"a "flurry of" → "a "flurr[y] of" per alteration of the source
"called it a" → "labeled the song a"
"The Midland refix was nominated" → "The Midland remix was nominated"
"79 in Slovakia and 101" → "number 79 in Slovakia and number 101"

Copyvio score looks incredible at 9.1%!!!!
Remove or replace ref 17 per WP:RSP
Cite Dancing Astronaut as publisher instead on ref 32
On ref 49, is the first citation really reliable when it is aligned as far-right? Also, cite Universo Online and Trome as publishers instead.

On hold until all of the issues are fixed! --K. Peake 19:59, 14 July 2022 (UTC)Reply

✗ Fail after no response; this is disappointing from an experienced user like LOVI33. --K. Peake 07:42, 2 August 2022 (UTC)Reply