Talk:Portia White/GA1

Latest comment: 4 years ago by BennyOnTheLoose in topic GA Review

GA Review

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Reviewer: BennyOnTheLoose (talk · contribs) 02:40, 20 May 2020 (UTC)Reply


GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)
  1. It is reasonably well written.
    a (prose, spelling, and grammar):   b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):  
    Well structured and well written.
  2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.
    a (reference section):   b (citations to reliable sources):   c (OR):   d (copyvio and plagiarism):  
    Good use of reliable sources. I looked through all matches above 3% on Earwig's Copyvio Tool, and had no concerns.
  3. It is broad in its coverage.
    a (major aspects):   b (focused):  
    Based on my reading of the sources used, the coverage is appropriate and balanced.
  4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.
    Fair representation without bias:  
    Suitable tone of voice maintained throughout.
  5. It is stable.
    No edit wars, etc.:  
  6. It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
    a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales):   b (appropriate use with suitable captions):  
  7. Overall:
    Pass/Fail:  

I'm happy to discuss, or be challenged on, any of my review comments. Regards, BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 02:40, 20 May 2020 (UTC)Reply

Alanna the Brave Thanks for your work on this article. It reads well and makes good use of reliable sources. I have a couple of points for consideration, noted below. Let me know if you have any questions. Regards, BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 12:25, 20 May 2020 (UTC)Reply

Check of Sources

  • Canadian Encyclopedia  
  • "Canadian contralto Portia White's life on the stage"   Redundant as a reference as the Canadian Encyclopedia also verifies full name, date of birth and place of birth. Consider making this an external link instead.  Y BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 17:38, 20 May 2020 (UTC)Reply
  • "Performer, educator Lorne White dies"  
  • "Senator Donald Oliver"  
  • Ito
"where her mother was also the musical director" - I couldn't see where this was verified by this source. It is verified in Nurse (1998).  Y BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 17:38, 20 May 2020 (UTC)Reply
  • Nurse (2009) - preview not available on Google Books for me. No reason not to assume good faith.
  • Hamilton (2009) - only part of the preview was available on Google Books for me. No reason not to assume good faith.
  • Nurse (1998)  
  • The Centre for Canadian Studies  
  • Forster
"even receiving a surprise career management offer from Oxford University Press" - This sounds surprising to me, but I don't think the source quite supports that description, so I'd suggest changing it to something like the blander "and received a career management offer..."  Y BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 17:38, 20 May 2020 (UTC)Reply
"an expensive white fox cape" - Source doesn't mention that it was expensive, so I suggest omitting that word.  Y BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 17:38, 20 May 2020 (UTC)Reply
  • Hamilton (2004)  
  • Arsenault  
  • Choi  
  • Marcogliese  
  • Our History - Nova Scotia Talent Trust  
  • Special awards - Nova Scotia Talent Trust  
  • Arts Nova Scotia  
  • Parks Canada  
  • Halifax Regional Municipality - Official Street List  
  • Devereaux  
  • Poland
Has the title as Portia rather than Portia White: First You Dream. Maybe add another reference - Portia White: First You Dream should have some.  Y BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 17:38, 20 May 2020 (UTC)Reply
  • Victoria Playhouse
Unless it's an issue with how the page displays on mobile, there doesn't seem to be any supporting text on this page, even the title of the work. I don't think this is being used to verify anything that isn't covered elsewhere so consider moving this to external links.  Y BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 17:38, 20 May 2020 (UTC)Reply
  • CBC Books  

@BennyOnTheLoose: Thank you for the review -- I appreciate the thorough sourcing check, and I've incorporated your suggestions above (all sensible!). The only item I had some trouble with was the Portia stage play title: I hadn't realized it, but the play seems to have gone through multiple name changes. I added an additional source and noted that the play is sometimes simply "Portia". Please let me know if there is anything else in the article I need to address. Cheers, Alanna the Brave (talk) 15:19, 20 May 2020 (UTC)Reply

@Alanna the Brave: Thanks for making the amendments. I'm happy to pass this for GA. Well done! Regards, BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 17:38, 20 May 2020 (UTC)Reply