Talk:Pod (The Breeders album)/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: ElectricController (talk · contribs) 14:29, 8 October 2017 (UTC)

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)

1. It is reasonably well written.

   a (prose, spelling, and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):

2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.

   a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR): d (copyvio and plagiarism):

3. It is broad in its coverage.

   a (major aspects): b (focused):

4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.

   Fair representation without bias:

5. It is stable.

   No edit wars, etc.:

6. It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.

   a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):

7. Overall:

   Pass/Fail:

Lead

• "Pod is the debut album [...]" - Unlink "album".
• "The seeds of the group began when the Pixies' Kim Deal and Throwing Muses' Tanya Donelly became friends in 1988 and decided they would like to create music together." - "The group began when the Pixies' Kim Deal and Throwing Muses' Tanya Donelly became friends in 1988, and decided they would like to create music together."
• "[...] and Pitchfork ranked it as the #81 best of the 1990s" - "[...] and Pitchfork ranked it number 81 on its list of best albums of the 1990s".

Background and demo

• "(For the Breeders' first album, Walford used the pseudonym Shannon Daughton, because he did not want his participation to overshadow his role in Slint.)" - Maybe it would be better to convert it into a note.

Music and lyrics

• "[...] noted how Pod resembled the Pixies music" - "[...] noted how Pod resembled the Pixies' music"
• "'rides the edge between sweet and delicate frivolity and a fierce head-banging sing-a-long [...]'" - "'rides the edge between sweet and delicate frivolity and a fierce head-banging sing-a-long [sic] [...]'"
• "(For US distribution, 4AD originally licensed it to Rough Trade, which later went bankrupt; in 1992, its American distribution was picked up by Elektra Records.)" - I think this sentence does not need to be inside brackets.

Legacy

• "Wiggs has described her 'abiding affection' for Pod, calling its creation 'a pretty special experience. As individuals coming together to work on a shared project, and with so little time, everybody was really present, thoughtful, and focused, which I think you can hear in the song arrangements and the playing on that record.'" - Close paragraphing.
• "In 2003, Pitchfork listed the album at #81 on their list of the Top 100 Albums of the 1990s." - "In 2003, Pitchfork listed the album at number 81 on its list of the Top 100 Albums of the 1990s."

Personnel

• Please put a non-breaking space ( ) before the dashes.
• "Vaughan Oliver/ v23" - I believe it would be better to introduce to the reader what "v23" means (For what I've seen, it is a graphic design studio, isn't it? I'm not sure.)

References

• "Kandell, Steve" reference is a dead link. Can you fix it?

 On hold for now. – electricController 14:29, 8 October 2017 (UTC)

ElectricController, thank you so much for your review! I've made changes for all the points you mentioned. A couple of precisions about this:

• I wasn't exactly sure what you meant for the first Legacy comment, but looking again at what I had, I realized having the long quotation didn't add much, so I paraphrased it. This may or may not have been what you were thinking of, but does it look ok?
• I don't know why a bot labelled the Kandell ref as a dead link, because the link works fine for me. I have simply removed the "dead link" tag.

Let me know if you have any other concerns. Cheers, Moisejp (talk) 05:25, 9 October 2017 (UTC)

You have adressed all the issues. I will pass the article (by the way, congratulations on your work on it, I've seen that you wrote more than half of it!) – electricController 08:03, 9 October 2017 (UTC)

Thank you again for the time you spent on this and for your helpful ideas, ElectricController! Moisejp (talk) 16:58, 9 October 2017 (UTC)