Talk:Pilot (Once Upon a Time)/GA1
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GA Review
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Reviewer: Grapple X (talk · contribs) 02:15, 5 January 2012 (UTC)
GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria
Robbie Carlyle does strike me as a Rumpelstiltskin...
- Is it reasonably well written?
- A. Prose quality:
- "On advice from the Blue Fairy (Keegan Connor Tracy), Geppetto (Tony Amendola) and Pinocchio (Jakob Davies) fashion a cupboard from a magical tree which will allow one person to escape the Queen's curse" -> Had to read this sentence twice, at first it seemed like the advice was from all three. perhaps "Following the Blue Fairy's (Keegan Connor Tracy) advice, Geppetto (Tony Amendola) and Pinocchio (Jakob Davis)..."
"not-so-quaint Storybrooke, Maine" -> I don't know about this. I'd probably drop the "not-so-quaint" bit, as I think this comes across with the change from storybook to modern times.
Mr. Gold (Rumpelstiltskin), who also helped build and owns the entire town. -> I'd use em dashes instead of brackets here, as it would maintain consistency with all the other bracketed names being actors.
I'm not sure if I like the contractions to "Once" popping up so frequently but I think that's just me.
The lead mentions the actual dates of the IMDB airing, but the article body doesn't seem to.
Don't know if it's worth including the metascore for the series in an episode article.
- "On advice from the Blue Fairy (Keegan Connor Tracy), Geppetto (Tony Amendola) and Pinocchio (Jakob Davies) fashion a cupboard from a magical tree which will allow one person to escape the Queen's curse" -> Had to read this sentence twice, at first it seemed like the advice was from all three. perhaps "Following the Blue Fairy's (Keegan Connor Tracy) advice, Geppetto (Tony Amendola) and Pinocchio (Jakob Davis)..."
- B. MoS compliance for lead, layout, words to watch, fiction, and lists:
- MOS is fine.
- A. Prose quality:
- Is it factually accurate and verifiable?
- A. References to sources:
- B. Citation of reliable sources where necessary:
- C. No original research:
- No problems here.
- A. References to sources:
- Is it broad in its coverage?
- A. Major aspects:
- B. Focused:
- Scope is grand.
- A. Major aspects:
- Is it neutral?
- Fair representation without bias:
- Article is neutral and unbiased.
- Fair representation without bias:
- Is it stable?
- No edit wars, etc:
- History is stable and uncontroversial.
- No edit wars, etc:
- Does it contain images to illustrate the topic?
- A. Images are copyright tagged, and non-free images have fair use rationales:
- B. Images are provided where possible and appropriate, with suitable captions:
- One image (File:Onceuponpilot.jpg), fair use rationale is solid and image is used appropriately.
- A. Images are copyright tagged, and non-free images have fair use rationales:
- Overall:
- Pass or Fail:
- Just a few minor 1A fixes to see to. Hope this new series doesn't distract you from being a one-woman Fringe machine though. GRAPPLE X 02:15, 5 January 2012 (UTC)
- Pass or Fail:
- Thanks for the review! Don't worry, I plan to get the rest of Fringe's third season to GA soon. And yes, Carlyle does an eery job as Rumpel. Best regards, Ruby 2010/2013 02:35, 5 January 2012 (UTC)
- Had a look over the changes, ready to go with this one. Good work! GRAPPLE X 02:52, 5 January 2012 (UTC)
- Thanks! Ruby 2010/2013 02:54, 5 January 2012 (UTC)
- Had a look over the changes, ready to go with this one. Good work! GRAPPLE X 02:52, 5 January 2012 (UTC)
- Thanks for the review! Don't worry, I plan to get the rest of Fringe's third season to GA soon. And yes, Carlyle does an eery job as Rumpel. Best regards, Ruby 2010/2013 02:35, 5 January 2012 (UTC)