Talk:Peter Lombard II/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: MWright96 (talk · contribs) 17:14, 28 February 2018 (UTC)

1. It is reasonably well written.

   a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):

2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.

   a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):

3. It is broad in its coverage.

   a (major aspects): b (focused):

4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.

   Fair representation without bias:

5. It is stable.

   No edit wars, etc.:

6. It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.

   a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):

7. Overall:

   Pass/Fail:

Lead and infobox

• Lombard's birth date in the lede and infobox should be in the MM-DD-YYYY date format

Early life and education

• "Dr. Peter Lombard II was born 24 May, 1976 in Guam." - Peter Lombard II was born in Guam on May 24, 1976.; also it's not the Wikipedia to have titles like Dr. in the article
• Add the names of Lombard's parents which is in Ref 4
• Wikilink St. John's School to St. John's School (Guam)
• "Lombard attended the U.S. Naval Academy from 1995-98}} - 1995-98 should be 1995-1998 per MOS:DATERANGE
• Link valedictorian and CoSIDA
• "After, he studied at Johns Hopkins School of Medicine." - Afterward,

Pre-Olympics

• "Winning qualified him for the UCI Oceania Mountain Bike Cross Country Championship" - Winning the race
• "Lombard was the only Guamanian athlete to qualify for the 2016 Olympics on merit." - 2016 Summer Olympics
• "He also took a week off of work" - better: He also took a week's absence from work

2016 Summer Olympics

• "He crashed on the first and second lap." - laps

Post-Olympics

• "After Rio, he discovered he had spine issues." - try After the Games, he discovered he had spine issues. to avoid using "Rio" too closely to the end of the previous sentence

References

• The access date for Ref 2 should be in the MM-DD-YYY date format
• Refs 5, 6, 7 and 10 need to have the newspaper in the work field
• Ref 8 needs to have the name of the newspaper that published the story

Good effort as usual, with the prose and reference edits that are required. MWright96 (talk) 17:14, 28 February 2018 (UTC)

• Think I have fixed all of the above. --★Yexstorm2001★ (talk) 18:49, 28 February 2018 (UTC)
  • Thanks for your quick response Yexstorm2001. Am more than happy to promote this article to GA status. MWright96 (talk) 19:41, 28 February 2018 (UTC)