Talk:Paul Reinhart/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Sarastro1 (talk · contribs) 21:55, 14 April 2012 (UTC)

Looks very good overall. I followed most of it without too much trouble, just a few points. I did some very light copy-editing but feel free to revert anything I messed up or with which you do not agree.

• Maybe link "points" as this always confuses me!
• "He had been a protected player of the Rangers, but when the league eliminated the rules allowing teams to protect midget-aged players following the season, he was made eligible for the OMJHL's annual draft.": Not too sure about "protected player". And although it is linked, perhaps "junior player" would be more formal than "midget-aged"?
  • I tried to clarify what being "protected" meant at that time. On the latter suggestion, midget and junior are different age groups of minor hockey. In the modern game, midget players are 15-17 years old, and junior players are 16-20 - with limitations on eligibility for 16-year-olds. With that in mind, I will leave it at "midget-aged" for accuracy.
• "three team trade": Perhaps "three-team trade"?
  • Done
• "before breaking out offensively in the 1978–79 season": Did he change position to break out, or just start scoring?
  • Reworded to specify his offensive breakout occurred after switching positions.
• "Reinhart won numerous team honours during his four years in Kitchener including three awards for being the club's top defenceman": This sort of implies he won defensive awards in three of the four seasons. Is this correct? If so, I'm struggling if he had moved to centre, but that may be my hockey ignorance again.
  • I reworded. The source says "best defensive ability", so yes, he could (and did) win the award while playing at centre as well.
• "the 19-year-old Reinhart became the youngest player to appear for the team in Atlanta": Youngest ever? Youngest that season? And "in Atlanta" implies that the team played elsewhere at another time, so youngest since they moved? Just needs a little clarity.
  • It actually implied the team relocated at a point in the future. I reworded.
• "Reinhart improved to 67 points": I think something might be needed here: "improved his [what?] to 67 points"
  • The immediately preceding sentence noted he scored 47 points in the year previous.
• Ignorance again. "He remained an offensive leader for the team"; How is this possible if he was in defence? Apologies for silly questions!
  • No worries! I changed "leader" to "catalyst", which may not help you much. However, in hockey, defencemen can provide significant offence for their team. Reinhart, for instance, finished third overall in team scoring at least once.
• "His career total of 250 points also set a Flames franchise record": Record for what specifically? Points? Or points for a defenceman?
  • Oops, clarified that it was for a defenceman
• A few dablink issues (see the tool on this page)
  • Fixed the Johnson link. On his sons, I will leave it as is, because two of them are extremely likely to become notable within the next year and those links will be retarged to their own articles.
• I'm a little baffled by his switching between defence and offence at different times, but I think I more-or-less understand, and the playing style section covers it well enough. It is a little confusing to read of his defensive awards when he is scoring so much, but that may just be me and don't feel anything needs to be changed here.
  • I think I explained this in the note above; in hockey, strong defensive ability does not preclude also adding to a team's offence. One defenceman has actually won NHL scoring titles!
• Spot-checks reveal no issues.

I'll place this on hold, but no real problems and will pass once these minor issues are addressed or answered. --Sarastro1 (talk) 22:07, 14 April 2012 (UTC)

Should all be addressed. Thanks for the review! Resolute 22:44, 14 April 2012 (UTC)

All good now, and I think I appreciate the defence/offence part better now. Passing now. --Sarastro1 (talk) 22:51, 14 April 2012 (UTC)