Talk:Paul Henderson/GA1
Latest comment: 11 years ago by Resolute in topic GA Review
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Reviewer: Tomcat7 (talk · contribs) 20:27, 22 November 2012 (UTC)
- It is reasonably well written.
- It is factually accurate and verifiable.
- a (references):
b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
- a (references):
- It is broad in its coverage.
- a (major aspects): b (focused):
- a (major aspects):
- It follows the neutral point of view policy.
- Fair representation without bias:
- Fair representation without bias:
- It is stable.
- No edit wars, etc.:
- No edit wars, etc.:
- It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
- a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
- a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales):
- Overall:
- Pass/Fail:
- Pass/Fail:
Passing it. Here are a few nitpicks:
- "pee-wee tournament" - is it jargon, or teenage slang, or something totally different? Perhaps reword or link it.
- It is the name of an age level of minor hockey, which I have now linked to
- "history and physical education teacher" - highschool, college, university?
- Sources don't say. Only that he thought of quitting hockey to become a teacher.
- I am not sure if you need to put a comma after "however" in ", however the Detroit Red Wings". I think there should be a semicolon ahead this word and a comma after it.
- Reworded slightly
- " when they completed one of the biggest trades in league history to that time on March 3, 1968.[26]" - do you know the sum?
- It was a six-player trade, however quantifying these deals is always tough, as the "size" of a trade is often not just the number of players, but the quality of them too. I've noted it was a six player trade, regardless.
- "He also suffered torn chest muscles" - I added "from", correct me if I am wrong--Tomcat (7) 12:30, 24 November 2012 (UTC)