Talk:Passage of Humaitá/GA1

Latest comment: 6 years ago by Randomness74 in topic GA Review

GA Review

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Reviewer: Randomness74 (talk · contribs) 00:13, 22 April 2018 (UTC)Reply

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1. Well-written:
  1a. the prose is clear, concise, and understandable to an appropriately broad audience; spelling and grammar are correct.

Lead

  • “competent observers” - Competent is somewhat biased and under WP:MOS (I forgot which section) words like this should be avoided.
  • ”the most lethal in South American history” - not sure whether it’s talking about the war or operation or both.
  • ”block-aded” - dash should be removed as it’s one word.

Body

  • “His subordinates responded appropriately.” - Ditto as first comment for the lead.
  1b. it complies with the Manual of Style guidelines for lead sections, layout, words to watch, fiction, and list incorporation.
  • Picture in lede should be in infobox.
  • 1,200, not 1200.
  • Notes should be separated from references.
  • Section headers should be fixed under MOS:HEAD
2. Verifiable with no original research:
  2a. it contains a list of all references (sources of information), presented in accordance with the layout style guideline.
  2b. reliable sources are cited inline. All content that could reasonably be challenged, except for plot summaries and that which summarizes cited content elsewhere in the article, must be cited no later than the end of the paragraph (or line if the content is not in prose).
  • Some paragraphs and sentences need in-line citations
  2c. it contains no original research.
  2d. it contains no copyright violations or plagiarism.
3. Broad in its coverage:
  3a. it addresses the main aspects of the topic.
  • Just wondering, any official strength figures for both sides in terms of manpower?
  3b. it stays focused on the topic without going into unnecessary detail (see summary style).
  • Article seems way too long. Should be split up or shortened.
  4. Neutral: it represents viewpoints fairly and without editorial bias, giving due weight to each.
  5. Stable: it does not change significantly from day to day because of an ongoing edit war or content dispute.
6. Illustrated, if possible, by media such as images, video, or audio:
  6a. media are tagged with their copyright statuses, and valid non-free use rationales are provided for non-free content.
  6b. media are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions.
  7. Overall assessment.
  • Failed by nominator’s request.
  • This article seems riddled with problems, so I’m going to fail it after 7 days if no significant changes are made. You may want to get this article assessed at for B-class at MILHIST before applying for GA status and reading the guidelines at WP:GA before nominating.--Randomness74 (talk) 14:14, 22 April 2018 (UTC)Reply
    • By the nominator’s request, I will fail this article for now until he makes the changes and renominates (which I will hopefully find time to review).