Talk:Overthrow of the Roman monarchy/GA1
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Reviewer: Iazyges (talk · contribs) 05:55, 26 August 2022 (UTC)
Will take this on as well. Iazyges Consermonor Opus meum 05:55, 26 August 2022 (UTC)
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- by Romulus up to the reign of Tarquin. This historicity of the kings themselves is generally accepted insofar as there were kings in Rome. Modern scholars believe the traditional account to be mostly fictitious.
- Some scholars also reject the c. 500 BC dating of the republic's foundation.
- The next paragraphs are the sources which reject the c. 500 BC date. Ifly6 (talk) 19:20, 26 August 2022 (UTC)
- @Ifly6: Could you put the appropriate sources for the sentences themselves as a ref? It is standard practice for Good Articles that every bit of prose is cited, per 2b, with the only exception being the lede (assuming it is otherwise mentioned and supported in the body) Iazyges Consermonor Opus meum 19:24, 26 August 2022 (UTC)
- The next paragraphs are the sources which reject the c. 500 BC date. Ifly6 (talk) 19:20, 26 August 2022 (UTC)
- One of these practices is synchronism: placing important events in different societies on the same year.
- The overthrow of the Roman monarchy has frequently been the subject of various literary and artistic works since ancient times. It also influenced later politicians and revolutionaries.
- The death of Lucretia and the death of Brutus' sons also were subjects of many neoclassical paintings in the late 18th and early 19th centuries. has a source but, as pointed out by a current template, the source does not back the full text.
Discussion
edit- Bispham 2006, p. 32. the sfn does not have an associated cite in the Sources section, rendering an error. Iazyges Consermonor Opus meum 06:00, 26 August 2022 (UTC)
Prose Suggestions
editPlease note that almost all of these are suggestions, and can be implemented or ignored at your discretion. Any changes I deem necessary for the article to pass GA standards I will bold.
Lede
edit- later Roman historians invented a narrative of the events, traditionally dated to c. 509 BC, but largely believed to be fictitious by modern scholars. suggest later Roman historians invented a narrative of the events, traditionally dated to c. 509 BC, but this narrative is largely believed to be fictitious by modern scholars. to clarify that it is the narrative, not the dating, that is considered fictitious.
- The traditional narrative story suggest removing story.
Chronology
edit- Livy's list of consuls points to the republic's starting around 502–1 BC suggest changing republic's to republic
- "we have no way to prove or disprove most of the information contained [in the fasti]" would recommend directly attributing this to Drogula
Traditional account
edit- Archaeological evidence supports there having been kings in Rome suggest Archaeological evidence supports that there was once kings in Rome
Account
edit- ; Lucretia commits suicide. the lede actually contains more detail than the body here, suggest copying from the lede and expanding to ;Upon revealing the assault to some Roman noblemen, Lucretia commits suicide.
- Tarquin, the king, is then conducting a war against Ardea and rushes back to Rome on news of the coup suggest During this time, Tarquin was conducting a war against Ardea, but rushes back to Rome on news of the coup
- Note, however, that the Romans, also report that in this early period, the consuls were initially called praetores (deriving from "leader"). suggest removing note as it is odd to include it in prose
- who marches on Rome but is stopped by Horatius Cocles who holds a bridge alone against suggest changing holds to defends for clarity.
- With no more allies willing to throw themselves at the Romans, suggest changing throw themselves at to fight against
Development
edit- Most scholars now agree that as a result of this process the details of Livy's political and military narrative are unreliable, amounting to reconstruction or plausible invention by Livy himself or by his sources. suggest appending —S.P. Oakley
- Few can now doubt that earlier times tended, both consciously and unconsciously, to be re-created by a succession of Roman writers in light of the conditions in the third and second century. This was true even before [133 BC and] a new political climate in which historians had more urgent motives to project the [contemporaneous] political concerns and conflicts [on] earlier Roman history. suggest appending —Harriet Flower
- The narratives and details of the early republic are, therefore, even as the events are accepted in their most general terms. unless I'm misreading something it looks like a word is missing here? Perhaps The narratives and details of the early republic are doubtful, therefore, even as the events are accepted in their most general terms.
- This distrust is why "[Livy's narrative] has failed to carry much conviction among modern scholars, who have attacked its historical credentials in all kinds of ways" suggest Historian Tim Cornell states that this distrust is why "[Livy's narrative] has failed to carry much conviction among modern scholars, who have attacked its historical credentials in all kinds of ways"
Intervention by Porsenna
edit- "the division of power between two officials [is] maintained as a sensible arrangement". would directly attribute this to Forsythe.
Later foundation of the republic
edit- Some scholars also reject the c. 500 BC dating of the republic's foundation. Suggest bringing this sentence down into the beginning of the following paragraph
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