Talk:Open Arms (SZA song)/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Ippantekina (talk · contribs) 07:49, 24 March 2023 (UTC)

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)

1. It is reasonably well written.

   a. (prose, spelling, and grammar):

   b. (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):

2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.

   a. (reference section):

   b. (citations to reliable sources):

   c. (OR):

   d. (copyvio and plagiarism):

3. It is broad in its coverage.

   a. (major aspects):

   b. (focused):

4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.

   Fair representation without bias:

5. It is stable.

   No edit wars, etc.:

6. It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.

   a. (images are tagged and non-free content have non-free use rationales):

   b. (appropriate use with suitable captions):

7. Overall:

   Pass/fail:

(Criteria marked are unassessed)

Lead and infobox

• "backed by acoustic guitar" an acoustic guitar?
  • Rewritten

Background

• "for its vocals and eclectic musical style" nitpick-y but "SZA's vocals and its eclectic musical style"?
  • Tweaked. I prefer "the eclectic".
• "The roster ranged from Billie Eilish, Harry Styles, and Olivia Rodrigo; to Doja Cat, Drake, and Kendrick Lamar" interesting, but what makes you grouop Eilish/Styles/Rodrigo into one group and Doja/Drake/Kendrick into another?
  • Billie/Harry/Olivia are more of singers, and Doja/Drake/Kendrick are more of rappers. Listing them in an "A, B, C, D, E, and F" format feels flat and uninteresting, and "from A, B, C; to D, E, F" adds more flair.

Music and production

• "backed by finger-picked acoustic guitar" ditto "a finger-picked acoustic guitar"
  • Done
• I am uncertain if we need to capitalize "Black" as in "Black woman"
  • MOS:RACECAPS permits either capitalization
• "a departure from his usual sound" some more context on Scott's "usual sound" is helpful here
  • Also done

Release and reception

• "appears as the twentieth track" shouldn't it be "20th" for consistency?
• I'd move "Note 3" one sentence prior and only include the Observer ref for Empire's comment
  • +1 for both
• Any particular reason why the names of the critics for Variety (Amorosi) and the LA Times (Wood) are omitted?
  • Not really, I just thought they'd clutter the prose initially, but on second thought there's no harm naming them. Done

Verdict

• Overall a very solid article. My comments above are by no means detrimental to quality. Putting this  On hold until all my comments are addressed. Ippantekina (talk) 16:36, 25 March 2023 (UTC)
  • @Ippantekina: haven't seen you in a while! Hope Wiki-life and off-wiki life have been kind to you since we last met . Much gratitude for the brief review and the verdict; I've addressed everything that needs addressing. Looking forward to your responses. Best, ‍ ‍ Elias 🌊 ‍ ‍ ^{💬 "Will you call me?"}
    _{📝 "Will you hang me out to dry?"} 05:13, 26 March 2023 (UTC)

    Thanks for your kind words :) Sometimes I feel like Wiki sucks me in a little bit too strong but other than that I'm still balancing everything so far lol. Very good work on the article and thanks for addressing my comments--I need to learn a thing or two from you! Passing it now. Ippantekina (talk) 11:42, 27 March 2023 (UTC)