Talk:O'Brien Brewing and Malting Company/GA1

Latest comment: 9 years ago by Hchc2009 in topic GA Review

GA Review

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Reviewer: Edwininlondon (talk · contribs) 06:20, 23 September 2015 (UTC)Reply

Happy to take this on. At first glance this looks like a great article. I will have a good look later and report detailed comments here. Illustrations seems to be its only weak point. No chance of getting something like a logo and an image of what the site looks like today? Edwininlondon (talk) 06:20, 23 September 2015 (UTC)Reply

I've been unable to find any free images of the site; I've sounded out the Canadian wikiproject, in case anyone has any relatives etc. there, but so far with no luck. I've also struggled to find any free images of the beer logo/label; I'll do one more search, but so far I've only found copyrighted photos. Hchc2009 (talk) 13:47, 23 September 2015 (UTC)Reply

Excellent article. Well researched and well written. It is an instant pass for GA. I have a few comments, which you may want to address:

  • infobox: bit sparse on data, maybe add products sold, employees, sales
  • height of the rush -- which year was that?
  • Formation and Decline -> maybe a third section, or maybe rename Rise and Fall. Formation seems a bit off
  • situated alongside the Klondike Mines Railway terminal --> bit odd in same sentence with opening. Would it not be more connected to an earlier sentence, about the building?
  • I assume that no data exists for the years 1911 onwards. Or does the graph stop at 1910 because the Decline section ends with 1910?
  • Fairbanks probably worth a link?
  • I wouldn't use a ; in 'place; the remains' but just start a new sentence

I would urge you to take it even further and go for Featured Article status. Lack of key illustrations is its only weakness. Edwininlondon (talk) 18:15, 25 September 2015 (UTC)Reply

Changes made as suggested - cheers! I couldn't find many more stats for the infobox, but have added the products. The sources don't confirm that there is no data for 1911 onwards, but I've not found it reproduced anywhere. I'm still drawing a blank for copyright free images! Help from any kindly Canadians out there will be welcomed... :) Hchc2009 (talk) 16:06, 26 September 2015 (UTC)Reply