Talk:Nugroho Notosusanto/GA1

Latest comment: 11 years ago by Ed! in topic GA Review

GA Review

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Reviewer: Ed! (talk · contribs) 00:52, 12 January 2013 (UTC)Reply

  • "Professor" and "Brigadier General" shouldn't be titles toghether, as it's confusing to the layman that "Professor Brigadier General" isn't a rank.
  • "Despite wanting to remain in the military, influence by his father he continued his education," something is wrong with this sentence.
  • "... he finished his senior high school eduction, despite wanting to continue with the Army." -- no caps on "Army" here.
  • "the University of Indonesia (Universitas Indonesia, or UI)" if it is a non-english term it should be italicized.
  • "By the early 1960s Notosusanto had abandoned his literary career, focusing instead on history." -- this is sort of an abrupt transition. What prompted this?
  • "as a modern museum showcasing the military's role." -- its role in what?
  • Legacy section is very short. Expand or merge into another section.
  • Dup links tool returns no results. Dab links tool shows no errors. No problems with external links.
  • All images seem to be tagged and licensed appropriately. There are no apparent problems with stability in the article.
Will await responses. —Ed!(talk) 04:32, 12 January 2013 (UTC)Reply
Great work. Passing the article. —Ed!(talk) 17:11, 12 January 2013 (UTC)Reply