Talk:No Such Thing as Vampires/GA1

Latest comment: 16 years ago by Cornucopia 2008 in topic GA Review

GA Review

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Pretty good. Here are some suggestions for improvement.

  • In the lead, I would put the last two sentences in the beginning of the second paragraph instead, as they are more related to actors and storyline, then writing.
  • The plot could use some wikilinks. Link any character/actor not linked in the lead (Caroline, Ellis) and some terms (flashbacks, eulogy, and anything else that someone might need more info on).
  • It's --> it is (spell out all contractions unless they are in a quote)
  • "This episode established that Mick does not bite anyone; sleeps in a freezer, not a coffin; cannot turn into a bat; daylight's not good, but it does not cause him to burst into flames; and garlic, holy water and crucifixes do not work on him." - there is a lot going on in this sentence, and it might be better split into two separate ones
  • Is upfront a proper noun? I think it should not be cap.
  • Watch the overlinking in the reception section. Angel is linked several times.

Not too much to change. The article will be on hold for a week. Nikki311 21:01, 18 June 2008 (UTC)Reply

All the points have been taken care of, except for the "it's" because it is in a quote. Corn.u.co.pia Disc.us.sion 07:40, 19 June 2008 (UTC)Reply
It is in a quote! :) All these reviews must be making me lose my mind. Great work as always. Pass. Nikki311 02:36, 21 June 2008 (UTC)Reply
Thanks for the review! :-) Corn.u.co.pia Disc.us.sion 03:44, 21 June 2008 (UTC)Reply