Talk:Nina Simone/GA1

GA Reassessment

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This article has been reviewed as part of Wikipedia:WikiProject Good articles/Project quality task force in an effort to ensure all listed Good articles continue to meet the Good article criteria. In reviewing the article, I have found there are some issues that may need to be addressed, listed below. I will check back in seven days. If these issues are addressed, the article will remain listed as a Good article. Otherwise, it may be delisted (such a decision may be challenged through WP:GAR). If improved after it has been delisted, it may be nominated at WP:GAN. Feel free to drop a message on my talk page if you have any questions, and many thanks for all the hard work that has gone into this article thus far.

Reviewer: --Malleus Fatuorum 17:53, 21 February 2010 (UTC)

Images

• No fair use rationales are provided for File:Ninasimonelittlegirlblue.jpg, File:Ninasimonesilkandsoul.jpg, or File:Ninasimone small.jpg, and I doubt that any convincing rationale could be produced.
  • All removed. Jafeluv (talk) 09:14, 23 February 2010 (UTC)

Youth (1933–1954)

• This section is very muddled chronologically, jumping around as it does between her parents, her family's background and her early education. Needs to be reorganised and made more coherent.
  • I think it's better now. The first paragraph was kind of an outlier there. Jafeluv (talk) 10:11, 23 February 2010 (UTC)
• "Nina Simone, The High Priestess of Soul, has a lineage rich in multicultural ancestry." That's a dreadful way to open what is supposed to be a formally written encyclopedia entry.
  • Reworded. Jafeluv (talk) 09:54, 23 February 2010 (UTC)
• "When Simone confronted the examiner and asked why she was not accepted for a scholarship, the examiner told her 'because you're black'. Another black 'child prodigy' of the same period who apparently experienced this blatant racism of rejection was Philippa Schuyler from New York City." All direct quotations like those two need to be attributed.
  • Added a source to the first one. I've removed the second one, since it's not really relevant to Simone. Jafeluv (talk) 17:07, 23 February 2010 (UTC)

Becoming 'popular' (1959–1964)

• Why is "popular in scare quotes? Wasn't she really popular?
  • Removed. Jafeluv (talk) 09:14, 23 February 2010 (UTC)

Later life

• "She flew to Barbados, expecting her husband and manager, Andrew Stroud, to communicate with her when she had to perform again." This is the first we've been told that she was ever married, and draws attention to the lack of this article's coverage of Simone's personal life.
  • Introduced Stroud at the end of the Becoming popular (1959–1964) section. --Malleus Fatuorum 14:44, 1 March 2010 (UTC)

• Simone worked with her brother Sam Waymon at one point in her career did she not? Strange not to see that mentioned. Or indeed any mention of her brothers and sisters.

• The second paragraph is uncited.

Performing style

• "In a single concert she could be a singer, pianist, dancer, actress, or activist, all simultaneously." That's not what the source claims, it says: "Nina Simone was not just a piano player, singer and performer. She was all these things; separately and simultaneously." No mention of actress, dancer, or activist. The conjunction of "or" with "simultaneously doesn't make sense anyway.
  • I've changed this to "She was a piano, player, singer and performer, 'separately and simultaneously'". --Malleus Fatuorum 14:27, 1 March 2010 (UTC)

References

• There's one dead link. [1]
  • Replaced with [2]. Jafeluv (talk) 18:54, 21 February 2010 (UTC)
• Need to be consistent about using "p" or "pp" for page numbers; "p" is for a single page and "pp" is for a page range.
  • Done. #15 still needs a page number, though. Jafeluv (talk) 20:03, 21 February 2010 (UTC)
• Where first name and last name are given they're given in that order, but in the following section they're reversed (last first name). Need to be consistent.
  • Done. Jafeluv (talk) 09:54, 23 February 2010 (UTC)
• Citation #6, for instance, is given as "Simone. I Put a Spell on You. pp. 26. If that's a reference to the book of that name in the Further reading section then it ought to be formatted as "Simone & Cleary 2003. p. 26".
  • Done. Jafeluv (talk) 09:54, 23 February 2010 (UTC)

Further Reading

• This isn't a Further reading section as most of these books are referenced in citations. This is a Bibliography section; Further reading is for additional sources not referred to in the article.
  • Changed. Jafeluv (talk) 09:14, 23 February 2010 (UTC)

There are a few minor things that probably ought to be fixed still, but overall nothing I think compromises this article's GA status, so I'm closing this review now. --Malleus Fatuorum 15:01, 1 March 2010 (UTC)

The discussion above is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.