Talk:Nimco Ali/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Vacant0 (talk · contribs) 15:17, 2 January 2022 (UTC)

Hi! I saw this article on the GAN backlog. I will start the review asap. Cheers, --Vacant0 (talk) 15:17, 2 January 2022 (UTC)

Good Article review progress box Criteria: 1a. prose () 1b. MoS () 2a. ref layout () 2b. cites WP:RS () 2c. no WP:OR () 2d. no WP:CV () 3a. broadness () 3b. focus () 4. neutral () 5. stable () 6a. free or tagged images () 6b. pics relevant () Note: this represents where the article stands relative to the Good Article criteria. Criteria marked are unassessed

Comments

General

• Image caption in the infobox can be shortened to just "Ali in 2019".
• My other recommendation for the infobox would be to change the Occupation from "Social activist, author." to {{hlist|Social activist|author}}.
• Uncapitalize the "The" in the "...and The book contained 42 stories...".
• The lede should be re-written to:

→ She is the co-founder and CEO of The Five Foundation, a global partnership to end female genital mutilation (FGM).

Ali underwent female genital mutilation in Djibouti, and later went on to form the Daughters of Eve organization with Leyla Hussein to campaign against FGM. She released her first book in 2019 that contains 42 stories from 152 interviews that Ali collected from women across 14 countries. Later that year she co-founded The Five Foundation with Brendan Wynne, and in 2020 she co-founded the Ginsburg Women's Health Board with Mika Simmons.

She contested a seat in the 2017 general election under the Women's Equality Party. In 2019, she supported Boris Johnson, endorsed the Conservative Party and campaigned for Conservative candidates. She was appointed as Independent Government Adviser for Tackling Violence Against Women and Girls in 2020.

• In the "Isobel Shirlaw said in i that it was an important book and that "The chorus of women's voices which provide a multi-dimensional, global view of these hidden issues is powerful."" sentence, the last quotation mark should be moved on the left side of the comma.

Amended as per the above. BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 10:47, 4 January 2022 (UTC)

Images

• Looks good. It is optional but another image with Matt Hancock can be added from here, to the "Political activity" section.
  • Nice find, but I wasn't able to capture what I felt was a suitable still, so I didn't do this. BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 10:48, 4 January 2022 (UTC)

Sources

• All are alright, although the Twitter source should be replaced by a different reliable source. I've also found that she campaigns/campaigned for Conservatives, this should get added IMO.
  • Removed Twitter source, Amended text in line with the suggested source. BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 10:49, 4 January 2022 (UTC)

@BennyOnTheLoose: The article itself looks alright, although I will put it on hold until these issues get fixed. Cheers, --Vacant0 (talk) 16:28, 2 January 2022 (UTC)

Many thanks for reviewing this, Vacant0. Hopefully I've adequately addressed your comments. Let me know if anything else is required. Regards, BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 10:53, 4 January 2022 (UTC)

Everything is alright now, thanks. Promoting it. Vacant0 (talk) 13:02, 4 January 2022 (UTC)