double-vowel hyphenation isn't consistent, ie re-organisation and also reoccupy, reorganised and reattached Done hyphenation now consistent
LeadY
suggest During the latter stages of the war, the New Zealand Division was the strongest infantry division on the Western Front. After the armistice, it served on occupation duties in Germany before being disbanded in 1919. Done
BackgroundY
of the First World War Done
suggest of the then Done
were the basis Done
Formation
a mounted rifles regiment. Is this a reference to the Otago Mounted Rifle Regiment? If so, I'd use it in the text.Otago Mounted Rifles Regiment Done
wl field artillery and howitzer Done
worth stating Etaples is in France (as distinct from Belgium, for example) Done
Western FrontY
just the heading per 1b Done
Battle of the SommeY
suggest After a period of refit and training, in September 1916 the New Zealand Division was attached to XV Corps which, at the time, was participating in the Somme Offensive. Done
not sure what by alternative units means? Done Have had a go at reworking this.
del in warfare Done
planned for the 4th Battalion Done
and allowed the 3rd Battalion Done
its portion of the Blue Line Done
captured the Flers village Done
The 1st Battalion of the Rifle Brigade and drop the comma after Done
secure its first objective Done
wl counterattack Done
suggest breaking this sentence up It was a successful day for the division; it had captured the most ground of all the divisions of XV Corps involved in the battle and reached all four of its objectives although it ended the day in possession of three plus Flers village, which was actually in 41st Division's sector. Done
suggest The high ground was undefended, and the 1st Brigade easily captured it under the cover of a creeping barrage. Two days later, Factory Corner formed the launchpad for a further attack by the brigade and the neighbouring 55th Division on two more trenchlines, designated Gird Trench and Gird Support. Done
two battalions of the 2nd Brigade Done
which fell was to fall Done
suggest joined the fighting Done
Re-organisationY
it would embarked Done
suggest for laboring work in the corps rear area Done
relieve the 36th Division. Done
Battle of MessinesY
of Flanders Done
the first of which was the capture of Messines Ridge by II ANZAC Corps. Done
was ordered to capture Messines village
which was to push the front line out Done
via a series of outposts, designated the Dotted Black Line. This outpost line would serve as the starting point for the advance of the 4th Australian Division, which was to continue the attack to what was designated as the Green Line, a mile from the crest of the ridge. Done
wl Mining (military) Done
and the British 25th Division. They quickly moved... Done
wl prisoner-of-war Done
They continued to advance into stiffening resistance, but these opponents, soldiers of the 40th (Saxon) and 3rd (Bavarian) Divisions, were soon dealt with and the outskirts of Messines village were within sight. Done
The 3rd Battalion of the Rifle Brigade was attacking the village when it was slowed by two machine gun posts. however, in this section it is easy to get confused between the 3rd Brigade and the Rifle Brigade, which I presume from the ORBAT template are the same formation? Done (and fixed elsewhere in the article as well for sake of consistency).
I suggest you use the clearly defining regional names for the battalions where they existed, it helps to clarify who we are talking about. For example, when mentioning the 1st Brigade's 2nd Battalion, it would probably be better to refer to them as the 1st Battalion, Wellington Regiment, or 1st (Wellington) Battalion. It appears very confusing that there were four 1st battalions in the 1st Brigade etc. Is there a way to make this clearer? Done I have gone through and tweaked the text throughout to better identify the relevant battalions. In a few cases, I didn't think it was useful to do so. Let me know what you think.
captured ground. These casualties were inflicted despite Russell's attempts to keep the number of soldiers in the front line defences to a minimum and rely on artillery and machine guns as his primary means for defending against counterattacks. Done
Ypres OffensiveY
II Anzac should be II ANZAC for consistency with the rest of the article Done
suggest by winter through a series Done
Battle of BroodseindeY
distances should be presented consistently, here in metres twice, earlier in yards, also convert Done
The 4th Brigade moved Done
3rd Australian Division and rm the wl here and wl up at first mention in the Messines section Done
1st Infantry Brigade Done
and the ground quickly became boggy Done
Despite this, fFor Done
600 wounded. In the 1st Brigade, 192 were killed along with 700 wounded. avoiding unnecessary parentheses Done
suggest The British divisions of Godley's II ANZAC Corps were to be involved in the initial attack, which was to be followed by an advance on Passchendaele by the New Zealand Division on 12 October. Done
First Battle of PasschendaeleY
engineering commanders Done
through their predecessors to take the Blue Line Oops, not sure if I have done this or not. The text has changed a bit so can't work out where this goes.
the brigade confusion continues (Rifle vs 3rd Brigade) Done
3rd Australian Division in two places Done
wl 9th (Scottish) Division and use the same format further down Done
suggest The plan ordered both New Zealand brigades to advance with a one-battalion frontage, with three battalions of each brigade leapfrogging each other in sequence to capture objectives, designated as the Red, Blue and Green Lines, the last of which was Goudberg Spur. Done
Bit confused over the final NZ objective here, Bellevue or Goudberg Spur? Done have revised the text to make it a bit clearer how Bellevue and Goudberg Spurs relate to each other.
as did machine gun fire from Done
arranged in two belts, generally wire is described as being in belts Done
but were soon tooalso held up Done
attack the German pillboxes Done
which COs were killed? Done have reworded to avoid impression that these were senior officers
pushing on to and push on to Done
gunfire into Done
and would remained Done
Winter 1917–18Y
renaming as XXI Corps. The renamed corps Done
the village of Tiber Done
worth pointing out the Reutelbeek was a stream Done
the way the Canterbury and Otago Battalions are mentioned here makes sense to me. Perhaps adopt this approach throughout? Done as mentioned above
of the 2nd Infantry Brigade Done
Brigadier General Braithwaite per MOS:SURNAME Done
On recovery, Braithwaite just for clarity Done
wl William Massey Done
In other organisational changes, a divisional machine gun battalion was formed with the previously independent companies attached to each brigade. The New Zealand Pioneer Battalion divested itself of its company of Pākehā soldiers, which meant that it became a solely Maori unit, apart from its senior officers. needs wl to Pākehā and an explanation that it means "European-descent" Done I opted to redraft this section.
two separate but disorganised infantry attacks Done
push on to Done
renowned Done
Hundred Day OffensiveY
section heading needs "The" deleted Done
Third Army should be wl at first mention Done
across a 15 kilometres Done
by the 1st and 2nd Done
with the 2nd are they Infantry Brigades, or just Brigades, should be consistent throughout unless designations changed. Done
battalions from the 1st Brigade Done
from the 2nd and 3rd Done
the 2nd Division mentioned here, is it the British 2nd Division? If so, wl. Done
wl Selle Done
del "on 5 November" already stated it was the following day Done
for it was relieved on that night by 9 November doesn't make sense Done
I think Beauvois-en-Cambrésis is what is meant, also wl it Done
Occupation duties and disbandmentY
The first unit to leave the division was the Pioneer Battalion, and additional men were sent to England on leave. They remained there until transportation to New Zealand could be arranged. Done
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did the division have an identification symbol like the Australian colour patches? The various battalions had similar patches and the Rifle Brigade had unique badges as well but other than an NZEF cap badge/shoulder titles there wasn't a divisional patch.
no battle honours are listed? No, as far as I can make out these were awarded at regimental level, not at divisional level. Gray (2010) says that the battle honours of the wartime regiments were inherited by the Territorial Force regiments of their respective military districts.
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Peacemaker67, I have finished dealing with the items requiring attention above, but there are a few things that you just need to confirm you are happy with. Thanks for the detailed review, it is really helpful as this will go to ACR once you are happy with my amendments. Cheers. Zawed (talk) 09:31, 14 January 2015 (UTC)Reply