Talk:Neverland (U-KISS album)/GA1

Latest comment: 12 years ago by (CK)Lakeshade in topic GA Review

GA Review edit

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Reviewer: (CK)Lakeshade (talk · contribs) 07:20, 2 March 2012 (UTC)Reply

I'm sorry but after a quick read I'm going to be failing this article.

  • File:Neverland Album Cover.jpg is supposed to be 300x300 at max.
  • "(see release history)" we don't inter-wiki link per WP:MOS
  • "2011" Source? WP:NOR
  • WP:LEAD. Because information in the lead must come from the body of the article, references in the lead are redundant.
    • We have flow issues in the lead. You go from mentioning the release, to singles, to release again.
  • "they planned to work-out" They planned to what? If it's the gym, why is this relevant?
  • "On July 11, 2011 they" Comma after 2011.
  • "It has been reported that the boys worked with the best sound engineers in both Korea and Japan" Reported by who? Subjective claim anyways.
  • "It has also been revealed that" Revealed by who?
  • "selcas" not a common English word. What is this?
  • "Each of the members also began sharing updates from the set via Twitter. The boys are seen with unique style changes and dramatic smoky eye make up." Source for Twitter? Notable why? Second sentence I have no clue why this is needed.

That's the the first two sections and this is more than enough for a fail. Sentence structure needs work. The article itself needs re-written, re-structured and checked for silly facts (like their eye-makeup.) Further, not a single one of your references are formatted and all need re-done. - (CK)Lakeshade - talk2me - 07:20, 2 March 2012 (UTC)Reply