Talk:Movitz blåste en konsert/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: K. Peake (talk · contribs) 09:43, 7 April 2022 (UTC)

Good Article review progress box Criteria: 1a. prose () 1b. MoS () 2a. ref layout () 2b. cites WP:RS () 2c. no WP:OR () 2d. no WP:CV () 3a. broadness () 3b. focus () 4. neutral () 5. stable () 6a. free or tagged images () 6b. pics relevant () Note: this represents where the article stands relative to the Good Article criteria. Criteria marked are unassessed

New one for you! --K. Peake 09:43, 7 April 2022 (UTC)

Infobox and lead

• Infobox looks good!
  • Thanks!

• The subtitle info is not sourced anywhere
  • Reffed.

• Regarding this and the other instance of a ref in the lead, you should write out and source this info in the body, but keep the prose only here; no refs are appropriate. --K. Peake 20:36, 7 April 2022 (UTC)

• • Moved.
• The writing sentence should be the third of the first para instead
  • Moved.
• Add a comma after 1718 opera
  • Added.
• The ball is not sourced as being in the evening
  • Reffed.
• Shouldn't King be capitalised like in the body?
  • Done.
• "The song strikes a refined tone," → "It strikes a refined tone,"
  • I think the noun is better at the start of the paragraph.

• Using the song to start two consecutive sentences is a bad idea, but this sentence had been moved around to create this context so I copyedited for you. --K. Peake 06:48, 8 April 2022 (UTC)

Context

• Pipe Swedish ballad tradition to Scandinavian ballad tradition
  • Have made it point to the new Sweden section of that article.
• Second para looks good!
  • Thanks!

Song

Music

• Add relevant text to the audio sample
  • Added.
• "consisting of twelve lines." → "consisting of 12 lines." per MOS:NUM
  • Done.
• Write epistle No. 12 instead
  • Done.

Lyrics

• Why is there spaces before lines for Paul Britten Austin's verse?
  • You mean the indentations of some lines? That's Paul Britten Austin's formatting, indicating sections of the verse.

• Oh, thank you for explaining. --K. Peake 06:48, 8 April 2022 (UTC)

Reception and legacy

• Pipe Lake Mälaren to Mälaren, Djurgården Park to Djurgården and Bensvarvars to Ge rum i Bröllopsgåln din hund! on the img text
  • Done.
• Pipe to Air (music) should solely be on "air"
  • Done.
• "before the singing and" → "After this, the singing and"
  • Done.
• [13] should be solely at the end of the sentence
  • Done.
• I don't think "lending an air" is very appropriate; try something more encyclopedic
  • Edited.

• That looks a lot smoother! --K. Peake 06:48, 8 April 2022 (UTC)

Notes

• Good
  • Thanks.

References

• Copyvio score looks pretty good at 30.6%!!!
  • Noted.
• Why is ref 12 missing the language parameter?
  • Added. I didn't think "Epistel No. 51" worth translating but I've done it now anyway.

Sources

• Good
  • Noted.

External links

• Good
  • Noted.

Final comments and verdict

•  On hold until all of the issues are fixed; I left a comment above where you did not work on the lead properly. --K. Peake 20:36, 7 April 2022 (UTC)
  • @Kyle Peake: All done now. Chiswick Chap (talk) 21:03, 7 April 2022 (UTC)

• ✓ Pass time, once again I am very satisfied with your quick responses! --K. Peake 06:48, 8 April 2022 (UTC)