Talk:Monolith Soft/GA1

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Reviewer: TarkusAB (talk · contribs) 15:26, 13 October 2017 (UTC)

Namco era

• the latter a project influenced by the younger developers at Monolith Soft. - I don't think "influenced" is the right word here. Maybe "fueled" or "driven" would work better.
• began development following the release of Episode I under a new team - Reorder: "began development under a new team following the release of Episode I"
• While developing Xenosaga Episode II shifted their focus to help tell the story through multiple media. - I think this sentence is unfinished, or missing a word...sounds funny
• The game was co-developed Tom Create with collaboration from multiple staff - "co-developed WITH Tome Create IN collaboration"...I think that's what you're trying to say
• You start out by saying the Xenosaga series was planned as a hexalogy, but when they begin development on Episode III, you say it was their last planned entry. Was their any reason they decided to cut the series length in half?

Nintendo era

• According to Sugiura, Monolith Soft's relations with Namco had undergone a negative change after Nakamura retired. - Did he retire when they merged with Bandai? This is the first time it's mentioned, a note when retired would be nice because it seems important.

2010s

• ...working on a followup titled Xenoblade Chronicles X. A spiritual successor to the first game for the Wii U, and the company's... - move the Wii U piece earlier, it sounds like the first game was for the Wii U, which it wasn't: ...working on a followup titled Xenoblade Chronicles X for the Wii U. A spiritual successor to the first game, and the company's...

Philosophy

• in addition to "hiring younger hands" - Can we sum this up to remove the quote, maybe say "in addition to hiring young staff"
• In the same interview, Kojima stated that younger developers were preferred as they could bring interesting ideas to a project. This sentence sounds like it would fit better in the first paragraph of the section where they talk more about the young staff.

Other

• Would be nice to get a picture or two in here to help illustrate the article. Maybe you already tried looking, but see if you can find any free pictures of key Monolith staff.

Fantastic, cohesive article. See above comments. TarkusAB^talk 21:39, 13 October 2017 (UTC

@TarkusAB: I've addressed all the concerns raised. As to additional images, there are none at present, and I don't know the full procedure for uploading images with the suitable licensing, so I couldn't include any images of key staff. --ProtoDrake (talk) 11:44, 14 October 2017 (UTC)

Looks good. Pass! TarkusAB^talk 15:15, 14 October 2017 (UTC)